Talk:Wizards of Waverly Place/GA1

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Reviewer: LM150 (talk · contribs) 16:04, 6 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Happy to review this. I haven't seen this sitcom in a long time, but I remember seeing it show up in programme guides quite frequently when I was working for Disney! Anyhow, the article is a good read, so thanks for bringing it up to GA standard. Here's some feedback/comments before I promote..

  • "focus on family, friendship, and growing up." - the term "adolescence" might sound better here
  • "In an essay, Colin Ackerman analysed.." - who's Colin Ackerman? Author, scholar, critic?
  • Wiki-linking of some common terms; not sure how useful they are to general readers: shopping mall, sandwich shop, family business, role model, fall, etc among others.
  • Disney Channel has been wiki-linked twice
  • "Mark Robinson wrote in a blog.." - is he an author, critic?
  • Films and specials section - you've used both "film" and "movie" here. Perhaps just use "film" for consistency?
  • Sources appear to be archived and reliable
  • Images - suitable captions and tagged
  • No copyright issues found

A few tweaks here and there, nothing major. Thanks, LM150 16:04, 6 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Hi @LM150:, welcome to the article and thanks for the review. Working for Disney (Channel?) sounds incredible, would love to hear more about it! I have fixed all of the above suggestions. Please let me know if I missed anything. Thanks! SatDis (talk) 02:34, 7 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey ~

  • "Critics have found fault with the.." - might sound better as "Critics have criticized the.."
  • "Merchandising" header - would "Home media" be a more appropriate header? No pressure to change it though.

For future improvement, I think the story and characters section could be expanded a little. As could the critical reception. It's also possible to add the track listing of soundtrack. However, I'm not going to stop this from obtaining GA now, as the article is broad enough.

And yes! I worked in media technology, and my role was to support the broadcast systems which aired Disney Channel content in Europe, Middle East and Africa. It wasn't a glamorous job, but I had the opportunity to meet the likes of CEO Bob Iger, Lucasfilm president Kathleen Kennedy, and actress Scarlett Johansson of the Marvel films! Toy sales and a cinema screening room were highlights too! LM150 16:56, 7 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Hi @LM150:, sorry, "critics criticized" doesn't sound right to me, just in terms of flow of writing, that's why I used "found fault with". I've used "Merchandising" as it not only covers home media, but the soundtrack album and video games as well.
  • Thanks for the review. That role sounds excellent, what a dream to work for Disney in any capacity! SatDis (talk) 12:03, 10 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
    Ok great, now passing! LM150 19:12, 10 March 2021 (UTC)Reply