Talk:Women's suffrage in Wyoming

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Hi Afh1858 a few things:

• I moved the article to a different title for several reason. One reason was for capitalization. Article titles are "Sentence case", meaning that only the first word and proper nouns are capitalized. Another reason was for parallel structure. I changed "Woman" to "Women's" because existing articles (Women's suffrage in the United States; Women's suffrage in Utah, Women's suffrage in Virginia) all use the plural possessive "women's" instead of the singular "woman". This way, the structure of the article title is more similar to existing articles.
• I also made some formatting fixes
• "Continental Divide" is a proper noun and should be capitalized
• Articles are written in past tense generally (It includes South Pass, the gently sloping place where people have crossed the continental divide for thousands of years
  • Also with this sentence, watch for "flowery language". While it can be tempting to want to include imagery and more descriptive language, encyclopedic writing tends to be pretty straightforward. Things that caught my eye about this sentence were "gently sloping" and "thousands of years".
• The party politics were fierce about expanding voting rights. this sentence is unclear to me. Which party? Both parties?
• You are inconsistent whether or not you capitalize "black" in reference to African-Americans
• Watch out for "editorializing", or inserting your own personal voice and opinions. I'm referring to this sentence Not surprisingly, Grant soon appointed Republicans to run the brand-new Wyoming Territory.
• This sounds like what we call "original research", which is similar to editorializing in that the writer is inserting their opinion rather than referencing what is stated in a reliable source: Many Democrats saw Carey’s opinion as a move to make sure Wyoming’s black people voted Republican, and they were probably right.
• Inconsistent whether you consider Legislature a proper noun or not
• Bold is only used in certain circumstances ("Amalia Post"). If you think this person should have an article, you can add a link to their name. The link will appear as a red link rather than a blue link, but this can be effective in highlighting to others that the article does not exist.
• It is a red flag if a section or a paragraph ends without a citation
  • Missing citation: Because Wyoming was a territory, all officials were appointed, including the governor, county commissioners, county attorneys, justices of the peace, and town constables.
  • Citation needed here: Over the eight months, Morris adjudicated 70 cases and only two were overturned.
  • Citations missing for the last two sentences
• More editorializing here To his credit, Gov. Campbell vetoed the repeal

Let me know if you have any questions about this feedback! Great job creating this article! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 02:31, 25 July 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for feedback!

This is all hugely helpful. I agree with the title change - in fact, as I linked it to the Utah page and others, I saw that Women's suffrage was more common and was trying to figure out how to change it. I will look at the other more editorial changes I need to make - especially with tone and citations - and work on those this coming week. Afh1858 (talk) 02:48, 25 July 2019 (UTC)