Talk:Wonder Wheel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 02:30, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

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Lead You state that Coney Island hand a financial and economic decline. This seems a bit repetitive to me, but maybe you meant something distinct by each one.

• @Hog Farm: I removed "financial" as it's indeed is unnecessary. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

"it was sold to the Vourderis family, who continues to operate" - Since the family as a unit is the object here, I would think that the singular continue would be the more grammatical form, but I may be wrong.

• Actually, "continue" would be plural. Weird, but see "the families continue" vs. "the family continues". epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Infobox - The reference number parameter is not cited in either the infobox or the text; it should be cited somewhere.

• I though it was referenced in the infobox, by the "date" parameter. Anyway, fixed. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Is the Eccentric Ferris Wheel Company notable? If so, leave the redlink in the article. If not, it's probably best to remove the wikilinks.

• Yes, but creating an article about this is out of my league. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Garms ownership "the thrill of a scenic railway, the fun of a Ferris wheel, and the excitement of the Chute-the-Chutes" - I'd almost go direct quotes here, just to signify that the Chute-the-Chutes is an item known at the time of the quote, since it's a bit of headscratcher just to sling in there. If you disagree with that, that's okay.

• I put it in quote. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Vourderis ownership "Vourderis stated that part of the wheel's allure had come from when he had proposed to his later-wife Lula atop the wheel almost four decades earlier, he had promised to give the wheel to his wife as a future gift" - This is ungrammatical. I'll let you chose how to fix this, but replacing the comma within a semicolon is probably the easiest way.

• Fixed, but with a colon. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

"and went into operation the next year." - My gut instinct would be to phrase it as "and reopened the next year" to avoid the implication that it was opening for the first time (obviously not true if the user read the rest of the article). Your editorial call here.

• Fixed. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Rides "A ride on the Wonder Wheel costs 10 credits; the cost of each credit varies depending on how many is purchased, but generally costs $1 if purchased individually" - Just to make sure I'm reading this right, this signifies each credit costs $1?

• Yes typically, but discounts are available. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

References WP:RSP lists no consensus for the reliability of the New York Post, but the uses here seem to be reliable.

• I generally consider NY Post reliable for city-related news, unreliable for gossip, and questionable for politics. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

Ref #24 has "DENO'S WONDER WHEEL" is all caps. Unless the source directly stylizes it like this, it should probably not be in all caps for MOS reasons.

• Fixed. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

That's about it. Good work so far, you're a prolific content improver. Hog Farm (talk) 03:32, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

• @Hog Farm: Thanks, I appreciate it. I have addressed all of the above. epicgenius (talk) 03:48, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
  • Passed as GA. Hog Farm (talk) 04:13, 17 February 2020 (UTC)