Talk:World (Lindita song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Paparazzzi (talk · contribs) 01:08, 19 April 2020 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• "the challenges within a modern society and rising up against wars and pleading for peace and love." reword this sentence

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:28, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• "with the Albanian-language song "Botë"." mention that "Botë" is actually "World"'s Albanian-language version

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:26, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• "the song live on numerous occasions, including in Amsterdam, Madrid and Tel Aviv." I think it would be ideal to state in which festivals/shows the song was performed as well

I think its better to keep this part as in other Eurovision articles. Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:26, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Background...

• "Lyrically, its about the challenges within a modern society as well as rising up against wars and pleading for peace and love" Reword this sentence, it sounds awkward, and mention who said the song was about that

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:55, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• "and that its lyrics would be translated into English." According to ref 2., the song was originally written in English but was translated to Albanian for purposes of the Festivalis

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 12:06, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• "World" was musically characterised as an English-language pop-rock "power", "spherical" and "Bond-style" ballad.[7][8][9][10] WP:OVERKILL. It would be better to mention which author said what about the song, expanding the section

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:55, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Music video and promotion

• "A science fiction-inspired" this is not supported by any source

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• Remove this, per WP:SYNTH: " It was released to generally positive reviews from critics and fans."

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• Can you elaborate on the performances she made in Madrid, Tel Aviv, Amsterdam? I'm talking about the dates, the festivals/events' names, if possible include something about the performance

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:36, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Critical reception

• "Upon its release, "World" received positive and mixed reviews from music critics. " again, WP:SYNTH

@Paparazzzi: Should i delete that now?--Lorik17 (talk) 12:09, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Iaof2017: Yes, unless you find a source stating the song received positive and mixed reviews from critics.--Paparazzzi (talk) 22:29, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Paparazzzi: Done.

• Unlink pop-rock

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

References

• The archive of ref 5 does not work

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• Replace ref 6 with this

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• The clip from ref 15 can't be played, I can't verify O'Connor's claims

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

• The archived url of reference 28 does not work

 Done--Lorik17 (talk) 11:23, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Verdict

• Very well-written. I'm going to put this on hold. Regards, Paparazzzi (talk) 06:52, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

@Iaof2017: I have merged the composition and critical reception sections into one, because the latter was too short. I hope you don't mind. Also, something I forgot to mention, please describe the synopsis of the music video, using the YouTube video as a reference. I trust you could do it. I'm going to pass the nomination since my other comments were already addressed. Congratulations! --Paparazzzi (talk) 22:45, 23 April 2020 (UTC)