Talk:Worlds Apart (Falling Skies)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 21:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

Will review this soon. Ruby 2010/2013 21:32, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• "He replaced previous showrunner Mark Verheiden..." - Only need to say his full name once in the lead
• He stated that creating the follow-up was "a really fun challenge" and "came some really positive things that propel a lot of the storytelling in the second season." - needs a citation, even if it is cited in the article body; plus the second part of that quote isn't grammatically correct the way it is currently used in the sentence
• Wikilink characters in lead and plot sections. Also add actors after characters in plot section
• the two-hour season premiere achieved a viewership 4.46 million viewers - viewership of 4.46 million viewers? Also, saying viewers twice is redundant
• Link previous season finale in lead
• Many tense issues:

• Assuming their father was dead -> is dead
• "He saves her but her mother had been murdered by the mugger." -> He saves her but finds that her mother has been murdered by the mugger. (or something similar, so long as tense issue is fixed)
• "The new staff includes a new writing staff and showrunner" - included

• The plot section could be expanded with further background information for those unfamiliar with the show (like me). For instance, who or what are the Skitters? The Mechs? The 2nd Mass?
• "...Ben slits a Skitters throat, hating what they did to him" -> Did to who? Ben, or his father?
• I don't understand the part about the Skitter wrestling with his father
• The plot section definitely should be more than one paragraph. Consider expanding it and splitting into two or three
• "While there, he speaks to the Overlord through Karen, who tells Tom that there is a way for the humans to live in peace - being detained in a prison camp" - So his (or Karen's - not really clear) solution for peace is being detained in a prison camp?
• Make sure citations come after punctuation (see first para. of production section, for instance)
• Why mention Terry O'Quinn if he isn't in this episode?
• That massive paragraph in the production section definitely needs to be divided up for reader accessibility
• Briefly explain what cliffhanger you are talking about (link to episode isn't enough)

There's a lot here, and I haven't even finished the production section. The quote used in the quote box doesn't really mean anything without context (is Aubuchon talking about the first season?) Too many quotes are used in that section as well. I found other grammar issues (Once Aubuchon entered the writer's room, he began speaking of the cliffhanger "it became a really fun challenge.") I would recommend you have another editor copy edit this one, as it still needs a lot of work. Also, you should find a way to incorporate the massive quote in the reception section into prose (or at least trim it down). What makes the screenshot justified for this article? The Newday link is incorrect. Who is Chuck Barney? Some refs are missing information (accessdates, publishers etc). Ref two says at least seven episodes, not seven. I'm afraid I've found too many issues to reasonably place this review on hold. Fix these issues and feel free to re-nominate. I can tell you are passionate about the series, so I encourage you to continue contributing to the improvement of its articles on Wikipedia. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 01:32, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Worlds Apart (Falling Skies)/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 16:07, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

Issues:

• Infobox: Add "running time" and "guest stars"
• Lede: "strong" what does that mean
• Plot: Little small, should say what happened throughout whole episode
• Production: "He worked with Greg Beeman on the NBC series Heroes" off topic. Please remove
• Reviews: The Huffington Post should be linked
• References: Ref. 13 - Blogspot is not a good source Note: That Blogspot ref you're talking about is a blog written by the director of the episode. I think it's reliable because of the author.

On hold. TBrandley 16:14, 14 July 2012 (UTC)

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