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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 04:26, 14 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I've signed up for this review. I'll make uncontroversial copyedits as I read the article, and bring anything else here for discussion. Should have comments up in a few days at the latest. Sasata (talk) 04:26, 14 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

Comments

  • "This fort was designed for defense, as is evidenced the number of walls and ditches around the fort." could reword to avoid repetition of "fort"
    • Second occurrence changed to site
  • link bedrock in the lead
    • Done
  • The final sentence of the leads not discussed in the article text. Also, when was it designated as such?
  • Are the explorations dates listed in the "Dates of exploration" section the only ones known? Why the lack of interest?
    • They are the only known dates of exploration in the sources I found. (Dymond's book only references the first two, since it was written in the 1880s.) I'm sorry, but I am not certain what you mean by "lack of interest".
      • I just thought it was odd that there was these easily accessible site of historical interest, and there was over a 100-year gap where nobody had bothered to investigate the site and write up anything about it. Sasata (talk) 03:48, 22 December 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "Charles Dymond returned in 1880" I'd suggest that after the full names have been introduced, only the last name needs to be used later (other instances later as well)
  • "Finally, in 1998, the Avon Extensive Urban Study team performed the final assessment of the site." Why "final assessment"? Will there be no more excavations?
  • "This view is no longer as obvious as it once was" perhaps change "obvious" to "unobstructed" or something similar?
  • "The front faces of these platforms are about 1.7 metres (5.6 ft) above the hillside, and they have ditches in front of them to improve the defense of the platforms." reword to avoid repetition of "platforms"
  • "In a letter to Warre, an archaeologist who explored Worlebury Camp before Charles Dymond, Martin Atkins theorized…" I got the impression from a previous section that they had explored simultaneously, during 1851-52. When was this letter written? Who is Martin Atkins? Does Warre have a first name?
  • "…Martin Atkins theorized that these platforms were slingers' platforms or archers' stations.[10] Several sling stones have been found around these platforms, offering some credence to the theory that these are slingers' platforms." quadruple "platforms" are repetitious
  • "A couple of the stones were broken as though they had been used in defending the fort." How could they tell from the way they were broken that they had been used for fort defense?
  • "These two ramparts are still over 3 metres (10 ft) high." Source?
  • "… the inhabitants of the fort raised large breastworks" is "inhabitants" the right word to use here? Is there evidence they actually lived in the fort?
  • "These rubble barriers are over 1.22 metres (4.0 ft) high almost everywhere," "almost everywhere" is vague
  • "Attackers would have to clear away the rubble" -> "would have had to"
  • could you attach a date to the artist's rendition image?
  • what is a "transverse fosse"?
  • "The smallest pit is merely 1 metre (3.3 ft) long"
  • "They were intended for the storage of grain" Were they "intended" or "used"? Also, passive voice;why not "They were used for grain storage" or "They were used to store grain"?
  • "Several of the pits contained the remnants of small peas and the remnants of burned woven baskets" Could we leave out the word "small"? It is certain or important that the peas were small? Also, could refactor to remove a "remnants".
  • "However, researchers also found sling stones and spindle whorls" Why "however"? How does this sentence contrast with the previous?
  • how about a more descriptive caption for the mutilated skull pic (date of picture? when was this particular skull recovered?)
  • "Interestingly, this collar may be unique" Not Wikipedia's job to tell us what is interesting, let the interesting facts speak for themselves
  • "However, a related copper penannular brooch dating to the fifth or sixth century A.D." In what way is it related?
  • "A large number of Roman coins have been found at Worlebury Camp" What is a large number? Who found them? Where are these coins now?
  • "Another coin was located by Trinity Path which leads towards the fort." When?
    • The referenced sopurce document does not give a date & I've not been able to find it anywhere elese
  • "about the size of a walnut which he decides is probably a sling bullet." which->that; "decides is"->"decided was"
  • haven't arrow heads been found at the site as well?
  • link quarry
    • linked
  • in the image caption "19th century quarry", what direction are we looking at? Is that one of the north or west steep cliffs mentioned earlier?
  • "In 1849, a plan was made to develop houses" passive voice. Who made the plan?
  • "This would have wiped out the entire historic landmark and destroyed all the artifacts" How do we know for sure that this plan that never happened would have destroyed all the artifacts?
  • "… making it profitable to expand the villages into a town." Why villages (plural)? I thought it was previously talking about one village, Weston-super-Mare?
  • "In the early 20th century, the Worlebury fort itself has been damaged by boys rolling stones, including some from the walls of the fort, down the hill on which it stands. The Axbridge District of the Somerset Archaeological Society was taking steps to prevent such damage from happening again." The cited report is from 1909. So what happened? Also, the fort is at the top of the hill, so how could it be damaged by rolling stones down the hill?

I made a search of JSTOR for any additional information that might be included, and came up with the following:

"Worlebury camp was probably built either by the Goidel or by the Brython. This conclusion was derived from detailed consideration of the methods of construction in comparison with other encampments. It has been stated that his camp was occupied by the Belgae and sacked and destroyed by the Romans. This implies that the Belga must have driven out the Byrthons. Figs. 1 and 2 lead to the same conclusion with regard to the builders of these camps. A very elementary tactical knowledge will show that the enemies expected by the defenders of the camps lived to the north, In every case the camp is placed on the northern and lower slope of the Mendips, and backed by the higher hills, which must have been the country of those who built the camps. Such a state of affairs could only exist if the camps had been built by invaders from the south. This confirms the conclusion of Dymond, which was based in his case upon constructional details." (p. 212)
I think something from this suggesting the tribes which first established the site should be included - but I'm not sure where.— Rod talk 08:50, 22 December 2010 (UTC)Reply
I changed the "Dates of Exploration" section into a "History" section and added it there. Do you think this looks good? Reaper Eternal (talk) 03:08, 24 December 2010 (UTC)Reply
Looks good to me.— Rod talk 08:42, 24 December 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • another article mentions that "a Saxon dagger and a spear ferrule were found in one of the Worlebury hut-circle, near Weston-super-Mare ... The association of these relics with hut-circles, if they are indubitably Saxon, obviously raises an interesting problem." from JSTOR 2791336
  • I don't think this one should go in - I followed up the reference given to British History Online where it says "a Saxon dagger and spear-butt are said to have been found in one of the hut-circles on Worle Hill. (fn. 2) This site has been excavated with success, and proved to be a stronghold of an earlier population; so that the Saxon relic is here but slender evidence of occupation to any extent in the period preceding the conversion of Wessex. That was not accomplished till the middle of the seventh century, and till that date, perhaps for some time longer, it was customary to bury the warrior fully armed and the housewife with her ornaments and domestic utensils." So I don't think this is strong enough evidence of anything to include.— Rod talk 08:50, 22 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the additions and improvements. I think the article meets GA standards now. Sasata (talk) 15:34, 24 December 2010 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for criteria)

The article Worlebury Camp passes this review, and has been promoted to good article status. The article is found by the reviewing editor to be deserving of good article status based on the following criteria:

  1. It is reasonably well written.
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  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail: Pass
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