Talk:Wow (Inna song)/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 00:23, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead
  • I do not believe that the “To promote “Wow”," part is necessary as it is rather redundant.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (at the MediaPro Studios in Buftea, Romania), I do not believe you need “the” in front of the studio name.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • This part (The Wonderful Wizard of Oz) needs to be put into italics. Also, are you talking about the novel or the film in this context?
 Done I strongly believe we're talking about the novel based on the sources. Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (The song itself was nominated for Best Dance at the), you don’t need the word “itself”.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Background and reception
  • For this sentence (Musically, the genre of the single was described as "sexy" electropop.), you will need to attribute the quote (i.e. in a similar way to the caption for the audio sample).
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Were there any reviews for this song?
There weren't reviews of the song. You rarely get reviews on singles by Inna :( Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • I think that the second paragraph can be shortened. I am not sure that the week-by-week descriptions of the song’s performance on the Airplay 100 chart. You only really need the position that the song entered the chart, its peak, and the weeks that it was on the chart. Everything else is not necessary.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:47, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Music video
  • I could not find the information supporting this sentence (According to the singer, Aninaru came with the idea of referencing multiple fairy tale characters — including Snow White and The Wonderful Wizard of Oz) in the source provided.
There is a quote from Inna in [5], where she says: "Mi-a placut la nebunie propunerea lui, a fost o abordare indrazneata cu multe personaje, decoruri complexe pentru care s-a muncit mult." →→ "I loved his suggestion, it was a bold approach with many characters, complex scenes for which he worked a lot." The characters/stories interpolated in the video are supported by the other sources. Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Then, I am not sure how Reference 11 is being used, which comes directly after the part of the sentence that I mentioned above. The reference does not seem to be connected to this song at all so I would remove it. Aoba47 (talk) 17:55, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
@Aoba47: Hi there again! The reference provides information on the fairytales and stories interpolated in the video. Check it out and you'll see (Fun Fact). Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:04, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Please add ALT text for the image.
@Aoba47:  Fixed Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:48, 7 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The first sentence in the first paragraph needs a citation. It is not clear what reference is citing this information.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • For this part (— in the visual, which she agreed to.), the references are out of order.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • I am not sure what is meant by this phrase (an animated beach setting). I think saying just “beach” would do the job just fine.
It's "animated" because the beach setting is not real, it was "made" on the computer, if that makes any sense . Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • The references at the end of the second paragraph are out of order.
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Live performances
  • I would change (on 3 March 2012, celebrating five million fans on her Facebook page.) to (on 3 March 2012 to celebrate five million fans on her Facebook page.).
 Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Final comments
@Aoba47: Thank you very much for youre review! I've answered to all your comments. If I have time, I will take one of your GANs on review ;) Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 05:58, 6 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
Verdict
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