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Reviewer: Astrocog (talk • contribs • count) 16:09, 4 September 2011 (UTC)
- Fail. - I would not recommend this page for GA status yet. It is not a bad article, but it needs work done:
- Some of this page, such as the second paragraph in the Reception and legacy section, are copied directly from other sources. Whether or not the source is listed in the references, it is still not appropriate for text to be copied directly from other sources, unless it is a direct quote (and even those should be used sparingly). See Wikipedia:Wikipedia_Signpost/2009-04-13/Dispatches for more information.
- Much of the writing needs work, particularly in the Appearances and development section. Sentence structure is often confusing. For example, "Xena's subsequent life is marred by many tragedies. Her son Solan, who never came to know her as his mother, is killed, with the help of Callisto, by Hope, Gabrielle's demoniac child, and she nearly loses Gabrielle more than once." These two sentences should be broken up into a few more simple sentences. Separate out the loss of Xena's son from events involving Gabrielle. As it stands, it looks like nearly losing Gabrielle is directly connected with Xena's son being killed. The part which says "with the help of Callisto" is probably not necessary, and it only adds to my own confusion. This is just an example. The rest of the article has many such confusing and overly-complex sentences.
- A small amount of prose in the Appearances section read like it is in-universe. Check your fiction. Make sure that everything is written from an out-of-universe perspective. When referring to an event that happened "year ago," it needs to be clear that it happened "years ago" in the Xena universe, not in reality.
- Because Xena had some amount of popularity, I think there should be a lot more references. Newspaper and magazine reviews, for example. Currently, most of the references are to the show itself, and also from blogs and websites. Blogs and websites are at the bottom of what I would consider reliable sources. An article/journal database search can help with this. Contact me through my talk page if you would like advice or help finding these types of sources.
- Some other minor issues, such as dabs and inconsistent English usage, can be seen here.
I encourage the editors of this page to fix the issues above, and reapply in the future. AstroCog (talk) 16:09, 4 September 2011 (UTC)