Talk:Yars' Revenge/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Andrzejbanas (talk · contribs) 16:20, 10 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:01, 10 September 2024 (UTC)

Will take this on in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:01, 10 September 2024 (UTC)

@Andrzejbanas:

Six GA Criteria

1. Article is well-written. Very minimal mistakes if any at all.

2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.

3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the game and its development.

4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.

5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.

6. The article uses two fair use images with proper rationale.

Lead

-Does AllGame need italics?

Probably not. AllMusic, the sister site, does not use it. I think italics on websites is used for websites that were described as online magazines. AllMusic and AllGame were databases. Unless there is some naming convention for website rule I'm missing. I realize it is italicized in the review infobox, but I may take that up over there. They might know what is up. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

If AllMusic doesn't use it, it should be fine. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 15:24, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

-Why these three sources specifically? Wouldn't it be more concise just to say "retrospective critical reviews have been more positive" or something similar?

Might be a personal thing, but I if I don't feel like I can capture a source that says the overall reception or have a wide variety of publications saying this, I feel it is not accurate to say retrospective reviews were positive. I chose these three as they showed a variety of retrospective eras, authors, and location (US and UK) to give a more variety of reviews from different areas/sources. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

I have a different style of editing personally, but that's fair enough. Shouldn't be an issue then. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 15:23, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Plot

-The plot is a bit confusing since I don't know if the Yars are protagonists or antagonists here. It should be clarified if this backstory is in the game itself or not as well, given a lot of this info tends to be in manuals and the like from this time period.

I'll add that this is the backstory. I'm more from a WP:FILM background, so I try to follow MOS:FILMCAST, which states ". If roles are described outside of the plot summary, keep such descriptions concise. Subjective interpretation using labels such as protagonist, antagonist, villain, or main character, should be avoided. The plot summary should convey such roles." I've tried to clarify some things, but as a narrative, it does say they peacefully populate planets. I think that should give you the vibe they aren't the villains in a story. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Yeah, that's totally fair in terms of abject descriptions. The new description suffices well for emphasizing both of their roles in the story. Should be good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 15:26, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Gameplay

-"and cannot operate fire commands when within it." I'd reword to "cannot fire their weapon within it" for clarity.

Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

-I'm a bit confused how this whole "cell" system works. They are apparently part of the shield, but then also act as items you can "eat"? Does eating just mean hovering over it? Clarify this a bit.

Tried to clarify a bit. I think in the backstory it says they grow the power to eat basically anything and i'll expand on this that they can eat the energy shield. This is why I sometimes include gifs of gameplay in gold games, it can be really confusing to understand some bits and bobs. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Looks good. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 15:27, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Development

-Looks good

Promotion and release

-Looks good

Reception

-"on the comics book inclusion," re-word to "comic book's"

Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

-What is "Video Games?" It's a pretty generic name, so I'd clarify what it is. A magazine? A book? A newspaper column?

Clarified as a mazazine. Good call. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

-"that would grate on people's nerves" I would just change this to either "get on people's nerves" or "grate people's ears" or something similar

Re-phrased. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

Legacy

-Looks good

Overall

Looks pretty solid. Just clear up the above and this should be good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 13:00, 13 September 2024 (UTC)

@Pokelego999: thanks for taking a look at the article so quick! I believe I've addressed your issues. Andrzejbanas (talk) 11:57, 15 September 2024 (UTC)

@Andrzejbanas all issues are addressed. I'm happy to pass. Great work! Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 15:27, 15 September 2024 (UTC)