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Reviewer: Prism (talk · contribs) 14:58, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- First off thanks for the review, I will be fixing all that has been noted shortly. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
Links
edit- Disambiguation: None requiring correction.
- External: No dead link, although four Indeterminate-class links are denoted. (here).
- Already done before I read this. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
References
edit- FN2 could have Roc-A-Fella and Def Jam linked, although not mandatory.
- Many of these references have an unclear style—while I do observe {{cite news}} is used quite a lot, {{cite web}} is also used. And almost every reference here is missing its publisher (e.g.: MTV News is published by MTV; Digital Spy by Hearst Magazines UK), while some even have the location of the work or website. While that is acceptable, a lack of publisher in Cite web is not. Publisher required: - "Kanye West's Yeezus Gets Him 'Don Status' From DJ Khaled"; - "Who's Kanye West Sampling In Retro Yeezus Preview?"; - "Kanye West's 'Blood On The Leaves' And The History Of 'Strange Fruit'"; - "Can Kanye's Invisible Yeezus Artwork Still Nab A Best Package Grammy?"; - "The Origin Of The 'Yeezus' Cover" (which doesn't even have a |work= or |publisher= parameter to start with, merely url, dates and title); "Kanye West - chart history"; (...) please fix all Cite Web-style references without a publisher for its original source. (except some websites like PopDust and etc which have it unknown).
- Tip – If you're going to cite a website, there's no need for doing this: |work=x. Simply include |publisher=x.
- Singles section: "Official Charts Company" reference can have it wikilinked.
- "Kanye Reveals Next Single From ‘Yeezus’ – those apostrophes should be substituted with "'".
- Metacritic reference has it italicized, incorrectly.
- I believe I took care of them all, is there anything else outstanding that needs to be fixed? STATic message me! 05:06, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
Prose
editComment: Judging from an early read, this article's prose is almost excellent. Prism △ 14:58, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Lead section
- "The album began production in the living room of a loft space at a Paris hotel. West gathered various artists and close collaborators for work and production on the album, including Mike Dean and Daft Punk. Yeezus also features guest appearances from Assassin and King L, as well as previous collaborators Justin Vernon, Frank Ocean, Chief Keef, Kid Cudi and Charlie Wilson. West enlisted the help of producer Rick Rubin only 15 days before its due date to strip down the record's sound in favor of a more minimalist approach." – While this block of text is well written, it loses a bit of flow when reading it. Add some elements that help each sentence transition better into the other, so it isn't just sentence 1 sentence 2 sentence 3'.
- "West was inspired by minimalism from design, including architecture, and was particularly interested in the works of Le Corbusier, and visited The Louvre several times while in Paris." – I suggest you replace ", and was particularly interested" with ", with a particular interest in", in order to avoid the repetition of 'and'.
- "including, most notably," – "including and most notably,"
- Lead section changes done. STATic message me! 20:34, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Background
- "Following the release of his fifth album, My Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy (2010), West collaborated with longtime friend Jay-Z on Watch the Throne (2011)." – Could you please add a reference to support this?
- Recording and production
- The image certainly looks good, though is it well positioned relatively to the content? I don't think so, as it is a picture of the Louvre and the museum is only talked about in Background.
- Composition (Music and style)
- Samples' captions: please put New Slaves and Blood on the Leaves between quotation marks. Also, they aren't sourced, and the information (if sourced) could be transcluded into Song analysis.
- Still regarding the samples: the file purpose descriptions are seriously lacking, some don't even have one. You really need a better description and reasons as to why the sound samples are in the article.
- I did not upload them and I have no knowledge in uploading song samples or anything like that, so unless you can explain explicitly what needs to be done to them, I would rather remove them. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- You can remove them. Prism △ 21:21, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Okay then done. STATic message me! 05:07, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- Promotion
- "The final Yeezus track listing was confirmed by the French branch of Amazon.com on June 12." → Do you have a better source for this instead of just Amazon? It doesn't really prove that the track listing was revealed on that day.
- Removed as not being relevant to the promotion of the album. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Public reaction
- Nothing to address, actually. I just think you should somehow talk about how Yeezus inspired Lily Allen to name her LP Sheezus and how she (reportedly) is scared of potential lawsuits from West. There are sources!
- Heard about that, but not about the lawsuits. I think Kanye has enough money already hah. Sure I would be glad to add it to the article. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Well, not really a lawsuit, she's just worried he'll "call her out" on it, lol. Here Prism △ 21:57, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for the ref, I added a paragraph on it. STATic message me! 18:01, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- Heard about that, but not about the lawsuits. I think Kanye has enough money already hah. Sure I would be glad to add it to the article. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Critical reception (accolades)
- This section should talk about the Grammys Yeezus was nominated for, as well as his unexpected response to receiving them. This is vital information for the article as well, I don't see why this is being ignored.
- Not really "ignored" just not updated I suppose, adding shortly. STATic message me! 19:14, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- Alright, took me a bit but I have now added it. You are completely correct with it being vital information. So is that everything User:Prism? STATic message me! 18:01, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
Review history and summary
edit- March 4, 2014: Full review. Prism △ 14:58, 4 March 2014 (UTC)
- March 5, 2014: Grammy nominations still missing in lead and Accolades; there is also a problem with the Accolades table (badly formatted). Prism △ 11:53, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
- March 5, 2014, UPDATE: Passing review. Congratulations for the prose, which is beautifully written. Work on it a bit and FAC it. :) Prism △ 18:23, 5 March 2014 (UTC)
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