Talk:Yeezy Gap

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:27, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

• Hoping to get to this later today! 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 00:27, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• This was an interesting read; nice work! I have placed this nomination on hold for one week and left some comments below. Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns so that I can know when to reevaluate. Thanks! 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 05:01, 23 January 2023 (UTC)
• Nice work on the changes! I am now happy to pass this article for GA status. Congrats! 𓃦LunaEatsTuna (💬) 23:38, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go. Quotations are used in-line with WP:COPYQUOTE.

Files

All images used are relevant, high quality and copyright-free:

• File:YEEZY GAP.png: good, valid public domain rationale;
• File:YZY GAP, Chicago banner.jpg: good, CC-BY-SA 2.0. Although, I wish this was not in B&W but alas.

Prose

• "Yeezy Gap (stylized as YEEZY GAP)" – the name and stylisation should be boldfaced. Also: Y
• The logo is YZY; do the sources happen to say anything about this stylisation?

• As far as I can see, except for a few fringe sources, everyone refers to the collaboration as "Yeezy Gap" or "YEEZY GAP" including Gap itself, the logo is just different as the Yeezy brand by itself is sometimes stylized as YZY.

• Oh, I see!

• The lead could definitely be expanded by a few sentences to summarise some more of its history. Y
• "deep interest in Gap for years" – wikilink Gap. Y
• Wikilink Steve Jobs. Y
• "In 2009, West was set to collaborate with Gap, but the collaboration fell through." – is there anymore information on this?

• There is not much information about the details of the collaboration, but I did elaborate on why it fell through.

• Thanks, that info looks sufficient nonetheless.

• Two quotes in the article use curved quotation marks whilst the rest use standard ones (or whatever these " are called).

• Fixed

• "up to 8.5 million common stock shares of Gap" – wikilink common stock. Y
• Remove the ordinals (th) in the dates per MOS:DATESNO. Y
• "West's 2021 album "Donda" doubled" – album titles are spelled with italics without quotations. Y
• "in the history of Gap.com." – I presume this means in the history of Gap's online sales? If so, rephrase to make this more clear IMO. Y
• "that 70% of customers" – change to "70 percent" per MOS:%.Y
• Italicise Donda 2. Y
• "It contained accessories such as bags and hats alongside regular clothing." – needs a citation. Y

Refs

Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 4, 9, 14, 15, 22 or 24.

• A few of the citations are missing publication dates.

• Fixed

• Refs 5 and 15 are missing author names. I believe both were written by Jake Silbert?

• Fixed

• Refs 7 and 20 should not be URLs but publication names.

• Fixed

• Ref 12 is unusable per WP:PAGESIX. Try to find an alternative RS source. Speaking of: Y
• Per WP:TMZ, is there a better source available for ref 17?

• Better source found

Other

Infobox, Notes, short description, nav and cats good.

• Ads WP:ALT text to the images. Y
• Recommend adding template:Use mdy dates. Y
• Recommend adding template:Use X English. Y
• Is there a category for 2020 establishments that would fit this article?

• Doesn't seem to be anything that quite fits, as most are about companies established in 2020, Yeezy Gap was not a company.

• That is okay.

@LunaEatsTuna: I think that's everything! Thanks for taking the time to review ULPS (talk) 20:09, 23 January 2023 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Ooops

Noticed a slight problem that whomever may want to address.

"American clothing company Gap announced in June 2020, with its first wave of clothing releasing a year later in June 2021."

Ok but...

"In January 2022 the brand announced its collaboration with luxury fashion house Balenciaga, with the first collection from that line releasing the following month. It was terminated two years after its announcement in September 2022 after a series of disagreements between West and Gap executives."

So I think you're saying that the Yeezy Gap Collab started in June 2020 and was terminated in September 2022. And you are also saying maybe the Yeezy Gap brand announced another collaboration with Balenciaga in 2022 and ran until the end of Yeezy Gap.

If that was the intent I would suggest a rewrite for clarity as the use of the pronoun "it" makes it appear as if you are saying that Yeezy Gap started in 2020 and put out product in 2021.

And then you make a separate statement that in 2022 Yeezy Gap formed a collaboration with Balenciaga which ended two years later in 2022. Obviously that isn't possible.

Mayhaps the use of proper nouns, as there are multiple subjects, or a restructuring of the paragraph to keep your use of pronouns, but use them to refer to the last named subject.

Just my thoughts. 2600:8804:88C1:4100:716E:2D77:21C6:1405 (talk) 13:58, 18 May 2023 (UTC)