Talk:Your Majesty (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Reviewing this one shortly after its nomination! --K. Peake 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good
• Remove wikilink on studio album
• "of their debut album" → "of their debut studio album,"
• "They recorded their next album in" → "They later recorded the album in" since the later date makes it obvious this is about Your Majesty
• Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
• Wikilink tempos
• "it was compared with" → "comparisons were made to"
• "the New Pornographers and the Kinks," → "the New Pornographers, and the Kinks,"
• "up to the album's release," → "up to the release of it"
• "Your Majesty was promoted with" → "The album was promoted with"
• "and two headlining tours." → "and two headlining tours by the band."
• Critical reception sentence should open the third para instead of commercial one
• "Your Majesty charted on two" → "In the US, the album charted on two"
• "charts, peaking at number 15 on the Independent Albums and at number 17 on the Heatseekers Albums." → "charts. It peaked at number 15 and 17 on the Independent Albums and Heatseekers Albums charts, respectively."
• "The album received a mixed-to-positive reaction" → "Your Majesty received generally positive reviews"

Background and production

• "of independent label" → "of independent record label" with the wikilink
• Target acoustic to Acoustic music
• Wikilink electric piano
• "September and October that year," → "September and October of 2000,"
• "They spent the period" → "They spent the period after Christmas"
• "February and March 2001." → "February and March of 2001."
• "to recording their next album," → "to recording the album,"
• "did pre-production with" → "worked on pre-production with"
• "they went over" → "the Anniversary went over"
• Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
• "and brainstorming sessions." → "and frequent brainstorming."
• "in their hometown" → "in their hometown of"
• "acted as producer and" → "acted as producer for the album and"
• "they were assisted" → "the recording was assisted"
• "The band spent some" → "The Anniversary spent some"
• Target Malibu Beach to Malibu, California

Composition

• Retitle to Composition and lyrics
• Do the order of Berwanger and Roelofs need to be mentioned since it is the two same people; why not just mention they wrote all of the tracks?
• "the album also includes" → "it also includes"
• "been classified as emo" → "been classified as emo,"
• "than the band's debut album with" → "than Designing a Nervous Breakdown, with"
• Target rock to Rock music
• "The New Pornographers, and" → "the New Pornographers, and" per MOS:THEMUSIC
• "Pope switched from" → "For the album, Pope switched from"
• "upbeat energy of the band's first album." → "upbeat energy of Designing a Nervous Breakdown." with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Wikilink up-tempo per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Target pop to Pop music
• "of the Anniversary's debut album." → "of Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
• "is love song that is" → "is a love song that is" with the wikilink
• "that has an instrumental ending segueing" → "with an instrumental ending that segues"
• "playing guitars in" → "playing guitars for the track in"
• "are progressive-rock-indebted" → "are progressive rock-indebted"
• "with "The Death of the King" evokes the sound" → ""The Death of the King" evokes the sound"
• [16][14] should be put in numerical order

Release

• Retitle to Release and promotion
• "On September 3, the album's track listing" → "On September 3 of that year, the track listing for Your Majesty"
• "On September 24," → "Later that month,"
• "In October and November 2001, the band" → "In October and November of 2001, the Anniversary"
• "in February," → "in the following month,"
• "in March and April." → "in March and April of 2002."
• "In October and November, they went" → "In October and November of that year, the band went"
• "On November 19, Vagrant" → "On November 19, 2002, Vagrant"
• "video compilation titled" → "video compilation entitled"
• Wikilink music video
• Remove wikilink on Rich Egan
• "on the label's" → "on the record label's"
• Target message board to Internet forum
• "followed this up," → "followed the deletion up,"
• "said the label and the band" → "said Vagrant and the Anniversary"
• "the label had" → "the record label admittedly had"
• "replied Vagrant had no" → "replied Vagrant should have had no"
• "out-sold the band's debut." → "out-sold Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
• "In March and April," → "In March and April of 2003,"
• "In October and November," → "In October and November of that year,"
• "Carrier and Apollo Sunshine supported the second." → "the second was supported by Carrier and Apollo Sunshine."
• "the band broke up." → "the Anniversary broke up."

Reception

• "received generally favorable reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
• The reviews should start in a second para after the Metacritic sentence
• "Steve Servos said;" → "Steve Servos said,"
• "to those on the band's debut album." → "to the ones on Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
• "E! Online said the release" → "The staff of E! Online said Your Majesty"
• "that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the record" → "opining that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the album"
• "keyboard from the band's debut," → "keyboard from Designing a Nervous Breakdown,"
• "and that the tracks are" → "and the tracks are"
• "said Rob Schnapf's and Doug Boehm's work" → "said Schnapf's and Boehm's work"
• "Berwanger and Roelofs." → "Berwanger and Roelofs on the album."
• "found the band lacking in" → "found the Anniversary to be lacking in"
• "but it failed to do so" → "but had failed to do so"
• "Your Majesty reached number 15" → "Commercially, Your Majesty reached number 15"

Track listing

• Top should mention all songs were written by Justin Roelofs and Josh Berwanger, since they do not need to be ordered differently each time

Personnel

• Target Justin Roelofs to White Flight (band)

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks very good at 18.0%
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 21 and 35
• Cite Billboard as magazine for refs 38 and 39, though only target to Billboard (magazine) on ref 38

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold and I have noticed your skills as an editor have improved since when I started doing reviews of your articles a while back, well done! --K. Peake 11:30, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 11:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Yeepsi Quick response was nice to see, though there were a few remaining issues that I fixed with brief copyediting. ✓ Pass now, as is well deserved! --K. Peake 12:21, 18 October 2020 (UTC)