Talk:Yugoslav monitor Drava/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 17:26, 5 November 2014 (UTC)
I'll review this late tonight. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 17:26, 5 November 2014 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay - I'll get to this right away.
- Is it well-written?
- 1. "The Yugoslav monitor Drava was the name ship of the Enns-class river monitors built for the Austro-Hungarian Navy, and was completed in late 1914" - This wording sounds weird to me. How about "The Yugoslav monitor Drava was the name ship of the Enns-class river monitors built for the Austro-Hungarian Navy in 1914"?
- You're right, it is a bit strangely constructed. I've dropped the year, as the ship was actually built between 1912 and 1914. It's not really necessary in the lead.
- 2. "and fought the Serbian and Romanian armies" - This is just a suggestions, but how about adding "against" between "fought" and "the"?
- Done.
- 3. "Generalfeldmarschall (field marshal) August von Mackensen" - I suggesting changing "(field marshal)" to "(general field marshal)" as that translation is more used.
- It is meant as an equivalent rather than a translation, I'll add a note
- 4. Lastly, I suggest changing "Footnotes" to "References", "References" to "Sources", "Books" to "Printed", and "Websites" to "Online". Just a suggestion. :)
- That's the pattern I use for referencing all my articles, and it's in accordance with the MOS.
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- Is it neutral?
- Is it stable?
- Is it illustrated?
- The article is excellently written and meets the GA-criteria. Because the four points I left in the "Well-written" section and minor suggestions, I'm going to pass the article. :) Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 15:47, 7 November 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for the suggestions, and for the prompt review. Regards, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 21:50, 7 November 2014 (UTC)