Talk:Yugoslav monitor Vardar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 19:45, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

• I've substituted the ship template for your plain links to get rid of the redundancies. Please do the same, with the appropriate changes, to your other monitor article. Many of these comments will probably also apply.
  • Thanks, hadn't come across that one before. Not sure how to handle the ships that had a different name though. ie the Enns
    • Shouldn't be a problem either way so long as you fix "monitor Yugoslavia monitor XX" by amending the second half of the link to give only the italicized name.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:35, 1 November 2014 (UTC)
• What kind of engines did she have? I'd be astonished if she had turbines rather than triple- or quadruple-expansion steam engines. And if using them then horsepower is measured in indicated hp rather than shaft hp. Propulsion system is kind of generic and the actual engine type should be named instead.
  • Good point, I'm not that up-to-speed to navy lingo, but I worked out that "2 sets TE" meant 2 triple-expansion steam engines. Added.
• You don't say if she was in a ship class or not. If not then change the infobox |ship class= to |ship type =. If she was then add a link to the appropriate article even if it doesn't yet exist.
  • Added.
• I'm not fond of the various Jane's Fighting Ships compilations as they are reprints of the relevant editions with all the inaccuracies that that implies. Thus the range of figures that they give you. Greger and the various volumes of Conways are much better researched and should be used exclusively. Hopefully they don't use a range of numbers like those you've given here.
  • Have gone for Greger, Conway's aren't that helpful with this one. Have kept Jane's for a couple of minor points not covered in any other source.
• The template with automatically triple convert knots into miles and kilometers if you don't force the output into just km as you did here. Just delete |km from the template.
  • Done.
• Explain what L/10 means. Parsecboy has a good note that does exactly that that you should borrow in many of his articles. You might ask him to check for more detailed information in Warship International. (My copies are in storage.)
  • Done.
• Link conning tower.
  • Done.
• Add armour thicknesses to the infobox.
  • Screwed up the plain list template above it. Fixed.
• You don't explain how the high water meant that they couldn't pass under the bridges in the main body.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:45, 31 October 2014 (UTC)
  • All done now. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 04:11, 1 November 2014 (UTC)