Talk:Zach Auguste/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Editorofthewiki in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Editorofthewiki (talk · contribs) 15:27, 7 October 2015 (UTC)Reply


I shall be reviewing the article. It looks pretty good and shouldn't need more than minor work to reach GA status. ~EDDY (talk/contribs)~ 15:27, 7 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

  • The lead needs to be expanded.
Expanded.
  • Did he total 631 points as a junior or in his 3 years at Marlbourough?
Changed to "As a junior in 2009-10, Auguste averaged 22 points and received All-Star accolades from the Mid-Wachusett (Central Massachusetts) league and local newspapers the Telegram & Gazette and The MetroWest Daily News. He scored a total 631 points throughout his career at Marlborough."
  • "He cited the extra year along with a desire to get academically and physically ready for college as factors in a move he later lauded." This sentence is rather clunky.
Changed to "He cited his desire to get academically and physically ready for college as the main factors behind that decision.". I think it sounds better now.
  • "Nominated for the 2012 McDonald's All-American Boys Game,[6] he didn't make the final selection." Citation needed.
Citation added.
  • "Despite this, Solomon's steadfast attempts to recruit the player, widely ranked a 4-star recruit,[9][10][11][12] convinced Auguste to visit the campus, instantly enamored, he committed to Notre Dame on the spot in September 2011." This needs either a semicolon or to be divided into two sentences.
Changed to "Despite this, Solomon's steadfast attempts to recruit the player, widely ranked a 4-star recruit, convinced Auguste to visit the campus; he committed to Notre Dame on the spot in September 2011."
  • You should note that his game against Marquette was only a season high since the article later states he scored 25 points.
Changed to season-high.
  • "He had up and down performances, with good games, such as his first college double-double against Clemson (14 points, 12 rebounds),[17] followed by no-shows." It might just be me, but this sentence seems more colloquial than encyclopedic.
Replaced with "He recorded his first college double-double against Clemson having 14 points and 12 rebounds[...]"
  • Is SB Nation reliable?
Isn't it? Honestly.
  • Please explain what "college silverware" means.
Removed the silverware part per WP:CLICHE.
  • "He indeed was a big protagonist" Is this a novel?
Removed the phrase per WP:PEACOCK.
  • Not sure the YouTube vid is reliable.
I think it's OK per WP:SELFSOURCE. There no reason to question the video's authenticity, since it comes from Notre Dame's official youtube channel. It doesn't contain any exceptional claims, it gives personal info used in the article, doesn't say anything about third parties. Finally the article is not based on WP:SELFSOURCE as a primary means of verification.

On hold for 7 days. ~EDDY (talk/contribs)~ 15:42, 7 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

Despite concerns about SBNation's reliability, I'm passing this one. Good work! ~EDDY (talk/contribs)~ 15:46, 9 October 2015 (UTC)Reply