Talk:Zero Hour (Star Trek: Enterprise)/GA1

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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 20:45, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Hi there! I'll take this one. BenLinus1214^talk 20:45, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Comments

@Miyagawa:

• Do you really need a citation on the guest stars?

• I was told to on a review a long time ago, and it has become a bit of a habit now. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• What music by Jay Chattaway?

• Normally I remove the music mentions due to a lack of sourcing, but in this case there actually is some - the mention of it in the article body is hidden down in Home Media Release which talks about the music for the episode being released on CD. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• My main problem was that under featured music, it just has the artist's name. Do you have any sources saying what songs were used? BenLinus1214^talk 18:51, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• I've added the two song titles that were included in the soundtrack collection, but other than that I've never been able to find any decent sourcing generally for what songs were used where. Miyagawa (talk) 08:47, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

• Alright, that's fine. Pass.

• You should really flip the first sentence of the lead per other television articles: "Zero Hour" is the twenty-fourth and final episode of the third season of the American science fiction television series Star Trek: Enterprise, and the seventy-seventh episode overall."

• I don't know why I did it the wrong way around for this episode. I've fixed it now anyhow. Miyagawa (talk) 06:57, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• Actor parentheticals?

• I was told before to stop doing them in another review, so I did. But it is no problem to add them back. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• Eh, I prefer them but I don't really care. BenLinus1214^talk 18:51, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• "The episode took eight days to film…" This sentence has two uses of the verb "to include"

• Fixed. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• "The twist at the end of "Zero Hour"…" something goes weird at the end of this sentence.

• I think my fingers missed out a few words my brain was asking them to type. I've added them now, so let me know what you think. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• "Around 3.91" a little informal—maybe "roughly 3.91"

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• "Executive producer Brannon Braga…" This sentence was a little confusing to me at first--maybe put that he thought "Zero Hour" was the third act in a three act play consisting of those other two episodes.

• I've redrafted that line, let me know what you think now. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• In the second paragraph, probably put "Braga" instead of "Brannon" to make it sound less informal.

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• In your source, I don't see that the actors weren't given the final pages of the script due to its "sensitive" nature.

• I've cut that part of the sentence out. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• In the Bakula picture, I would make it clear that he eventually went back on his word--otherwise, it sounds kind of misleading.

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• In the last production paragraph, either reformat it or avoid the "there were" construction in the second sentence that only has one person.

Done. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• Add an archive url and date on the ABC Medianet.

• Done. That was typical really, we start moving to use that website as it seemed more reliable and then they go and shut it down. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• Yeah, I know. I use them for the VM articles too. BenLinus1214^talk 18:51, 15 June 2015 (UTC)

• Any Jammer's Reviews one for this episode? BenLinus1214^talk 23:31, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

• Added. Miyagawa (talk) 06:55, 15 June 2015 (UTC)