Template:Did you know nominations/Assassination of Ali Sayyad Shirazi
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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 19:55, 31 August 2019 (UTC)
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Assassination of Ali Sayyad Shirazi
Ali Sayyad Shirazi
... that Ali Sayyad Shirazi, the 3rd deputy chief of staff of the Iranian armed forces, was assassinated in 1999 by Mojahedin-e Khalq?Chicagotribune, New York Times
- Reviewed: Maple River State Game Area
Created by Mhhossein (talk). Self-nominated at 11:09, 19 July 2019 (UTC).
The article is new enough, long enough. I moved the NYT times citation to the bottom of the lead to make sure that your hook fact is directly followed by an inline citation. Does not appear to have copyright violations and the article approaches the subject in a neutral manner. I think your hook is okay. There are no problems with it; however, to make the hook more interesting and to get the article more views, you could consider adding that he was assassinated by someone dressed as a street cleaner. It makes the hook more interesting because it is unusual and unexpected. I think this would make the hook much more interesting. Let me know if you agree or disagree. Thanks. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 18:26, 16 August 2019 (UTC)
- Skyes(BYU): Thanks for the review and for the suggestion. It's was a brilliant idea which I tried to implement in ALT1 and ALT2. Please see if it's suitable and hooky:
ALT1: ... that Ali Sayyad Shirazi (pictured), the 3rd deputy chief of staff of the Iranian armed forces, was assassinated in 1999 by a Mojahedin-e Khalq agent disguised as a street cleaner?Chicagotribune, New York Times
- I also suggest adding Sayyad Shirazi's picture to the nomination. See if it's suitable for inclusion. --Mhhossein talk 11:37, 17 August 2019 (UTC)
- I approve ALT1, great improvement! Not sure about the image though. The url source for the image does not direct to a website so I am unable to determine whether the licensing of the image is valid. Unless you are willing to spend the time to track down the image source to determine whether it contains the appropriate copyright license, I recommend going without the image and I can just approve your ALT1 hook as is. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 18:53, 21 August 2019 (UTC)
- Skyes(BYU): OK, thanks for the review and let's go with your suggestion. There should be a check mark! --Mhhossein talk 17:17, 24 August 2019 (UTC)
- Here's the version without picture:
- ALT2: ... that Ali Sayyad Shirazi, the 3rd deputy chief of staff of the Iranian armed forces, was assassinated in 1999 by a Mojahedin-e Khalq agent disguised as a street cleaner? Chicagotribune, New York Times
- --Mhhossein talk 12:57, 25 August 2019 (UTC)
Approve ALT2 Skyes(BYU) (talk) 16:20, 27 August 2019 (UTC)
- Skyes(BYU): OK, thanks for the review and let's go with your suggestion. There should be a check mark! --Mhhossein talk 17:17, 24 August 2019 (UTC)
- I approve ALT1, great improvement! Not sure about the image though. The url source for the image does not direct to a website so I am unable to determine whether the licensing of the image is valid. Unless you are willing to spend the time to track down the image source to determine whether it contains the appropriate copyright license, I recommend going without the image and I can just approve your ALT1 hook as is. Skyes(BYU) (talk) 18:53, 21 August 2019 (UTC)
- Skyes(BYU): Thanks for the review and for the suggestion. It's was a brilliant idea which I tried to implement in ALT1 and ALT2. Please see if it's suitable and hooky:
