Template:Did you know nominations/Boston Society for Medical Improvement

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The result was: promoted by Panyd^{The muffin is not subtle} 21:47, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Boston Society for Medical Improvement

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~~... that Henry Jacob Bigelow presented Phineas Gage to the Boston Society for Medical Improvement (pictured) alongside the case of a phallic stalagmite?~~

ALT1:... that when the Boston Society for Medical Improvement (pictured) was first formed in 1828, its annual expense was only $7.50?
Reviewed: Megachile campanulae

Created by G S Palmer (talk). Self nominated at 23:15, 20 September 2014 (UTC).

This article is new enough and long enough. The hook facts have inline citations to reliable sources and I detected no policy issues. The image is in the public domain. I would go for the original hook as being more interesting than ALT1. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:00, 18 October 2014 (UTC)

I pulled this from prep NOT because of any error, but merely because I'd like to talk with nominator and reviewer about a possibly revised hook -- it's a subject I have a personal interest in and somehow I missed this nom until now. Two suggestions:
ALT2A ... that in 1849 Henry Jacob Bigelow presented Phineas Gage to the Boston Society for Medical Improvement (pictured) along with a phallic stalagmite?
ALT2B ... that in 1849 Henry Jacob Bigelow presented Phineas Gage to the Boston Society for Medical Improvement (pictured) along with a stalagmite "remarkable for its singular resemblance to a petrified penis"?

(The stalagmite would not have been considered a "case" but a "specimen", and I think it's a good idea to orient the reader chronologically. ALT2A is 189 chars, not counting (pictured).) EEng (talk) 15:04, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

@EEng: I think I would go with ALT2B; it's the better flowing of the two. And in response to your post on my talk page, I don't mind your having pulled this at all. I only found this article because of a redlink on Phineas Gage. G S Palmer (talk • contribs) 16:01, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Great, thanks for understanding. Not sure if you're aware of [1].

Cwmhiraeth, can you approve 2B? The quote is in the article, and I can vouch for the source if you can't find it online. EEng (talk)

@EEng: yes, I had seen that on your page. Thanks for fixing the link: for a while there I thought you were criticizing my use of commas in the article. :) G S Palmer (talk • contribs) 13:50, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Yeah, they can send men to the moon, but the stupid page anchors don't always take you to the right part of the page, so I thought I better clarify. However, if you'd like me to attack and denigrate your use of commas, I'll be happy to do that. Here's a free sample of services I've provided past clients. [2]

Seriously, I hope you don't mind my extensive copyediting last night. I believe I tightened things up a lot without losing any content. EEng (talk) 18:07, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Don't worry, you didn't do any damage I can't fix with a few sleepless nights. G S Palmer (talk • contribs) 20:35, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Works for me. EEng (talk) 21:03, 21 October 2014 (UTC)

Approving ALT2A and ALT2B, which are both suitably referenced, preferably using ALT2B as the more interesting hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:24, 20 October 2014 (UTC)