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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:54, 26 June 2017 (UTC)

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Breathe on Me, Breath of God

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Edwin Hatch
Edwin Hatch
  • ... that the hymn "Breathe on Me, Breath of God" was described as being so simple it belied the education and knowledge of its author, Professor Edwin Hatch (pictured)? Source: UMC

Created by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 14:30, 4 June 2017 (UTC).

  • The article is recent enough and long enough, but I have a few concerns that need to be addressed. First of all, I am not at all certain from reading the citation for the hook that it was an actual quotation from Hatch. Instead, I suspect that the statement originated with the author of the UMC article. Furthermore, for the sentence that reads "The handbook to the Psalter Hymnal, where "Breath on Me, Breath of God" was later published, referred to the oft quoted statement about Hatch's faith being "as simple and unaffected as a child" being an appropriate description of the hymn.", I can't find anything in the source that actually mentions the "simple and unaffected..." quote. Finally, there is some close paraphrasing with the Hymnary source, which also talks about how Hatch "grew up" in a non-conformist environment. Otherwise, this is a fine article. Lepricavark (talk) 00:42, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
  • @Lepricavark: I have made the change so that the hook doesn't make it a source. As for the simple line, it's in the Complete Book source. I have also reworded the background line. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 06:02, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
  • @The C of E: It would be helpful if you would also change the article itself so that it doesn't attribute the "belied the education..." quote to Hatch, since he most likely did not utter that quote. Also, the hook should use quotation marks since the wording is directly taken from the source. After those changes are made, this should be good to go. Lepricavark (talk) 23:44, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
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