- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:51, 30 June 2018 (UTC)
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Carmen y Laura
edit- ... that the two sisters of Tejano music group Carmen y Laura honed their careful harmony while doing chores in separate rooms?Jasinski, Laurie E., ed. (2012). The Handbook of Texas Music (2 ed.). Denton, TX: Texas State Historical Association. p. 99. ISBN 978-0-87611-252-6. "They practiced harmonizing as they carried out household chores in separate rooms at home, thereby discovering how to listen to each other closely."
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... that Carmen y Laura's musical performances would last up to 4 hours?Jasinski, Laurie E., ed. (2012). The Handbook of Texas Music (2 ed.). Denton, TX: Texas State Historical Association. p. 99. ISBN 978-0-87611-252-6. "Carmen y Laura worked intensely while on tour, often singing for dances that lasted for four hours."
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- Reviewed: Edna Loftus
- Comment: moved from draft space on June 6
Created by 78.26 (talk). Self-nominated at 17:26, 7 June 2018 (UTC).
Interesting lives, on good sources, offline sources accepted AGF, no copyvio obvious. - Hooks: I find the ALT too general, and only saying something about endurance. In the first, I like the mentioning of their style, and that they are sisters, but would not put it all together. How about "duo" instead of "group"? I wonder if the fact of them singing in different rooms is sooo ineresting. "careful harmony" sounds strange (to me), - well-tuned? How about saying something completely different? - Article: link the music style, and mention it sooner? A word seems to be missing in the second sentence. "female duet" sounds strange (at least to me), how about "women duo"? (I know duet as a piece, not a group.) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 13:30, 11 June 2018 (UTC)
- @Gerda Arendt: I dunno, I find the concept of learning to harmonize while in different rooms to be very interesting. If other's don't agree, I'll have to find something else. How about:
- ALT2: ... that Tejano music sister duo Carmen y Laura honed their harmony skills while doing chores in separate rooms?
- 78.26 (spin me / revolutions) 16:31, 11 June 2018 (UTC)
- Perhaps I am the only one who has no idea what "honed" means, which is not in the article. Suggestion:
- ALT3: ... that Carmen y Laura, sisters who formed a duo for mostly Tejano music, improved their skill in harmony by singing together while doing chores in separate rooms?
approved, unless you come up with an improvement. - I trust that you'll consider the suggestions for the article. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:41, 11 June 2018 (UTC)
- 78.26 (spin me / revolutions) 16:31, 11 June 2018 (UTC)
- The article is currently tagged for sectioning; it can't be promoted until this issue is resolved. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:49, 22 June 2018 (UTC)
- Let me not say what I think of tagging. I inserted a header, but refuse to post "Legacy" above one sentence. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:50, 22 June 2018 (UTC)
- The sectioning issue has been addressed, so I'm restoring the tick. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 08:43, 23 June 2018 (UTC)
- Let me not say what I think of tagging. I inserted a header, but refuse to post "Legacy" above one sentence. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:50, 22 June 2018 (UTC)