- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 22:54, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
| DYK toolbox |
|---|
Dominic Keegan
- ... that Dominic Keegan decided to "go back and win another championship" for the Vanderbilt Commodores baseball team despite being selected in the 2021 Major League Baseball draft? Source: https://www.tennessean.com/story/sports/college/vanderbilt/2022/04/14/dominic-keegan-12-facts-vanderbilt-baseball-catcher-infielder/7310668001/
- ALT1: ... that Dominic Keegan changed his commitment to Vanderbilt University after a removal of staff at Virginia Tech? Source: https://www.eagletribune.com/sports/local_sports/keegan-to-vandy/article_2d7638d4-fe85-53d3-bb04-2aea8ec2ab30.html
- Reviewed: (exempt)
Created by NotReallySoroka (talk). Self-nominated at 19:19, 26 May 2022 (UTC).
New enough and long enough. Nominator is QPQ exempt. ALT0 checks out, as does ALT1. I strongly prefer ALT0 over the weird "removal of staff" phrasing at ALT1. No textual issues. Good to go. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 22:25, 30 June 2022 (UTC)- @NotReallySoroka and Sammi Brie: I find it more interesting to say which team he was drafted by? theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 21:07, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- ALT0a: ... that Dominic Keegan turned down a spot on the New York Yankees, instead choosing to "go back and win another championship" for his college baseball team?
- ALT0b: ... that Dominic Keegan turned down a spot on the New York Yankees to remain with his college baseball team?
- @Theleekycauldron: May I suggest this?
- ALT0c: ... that Dominic Keegan decided to "go back and win another championship" for the Vanderbilt Commodores baseball team although the New York Yankees had drafted him in the 2021 Major League Baseball draft?
- This preserves the Keegan quote, adds "which team he was drafted by", and explains which college team he remains with for those unfamiliar with Keegan or Vanderbilt. Thanks, NotReallySoroka (talk) 21:20, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- @NotReallySoroka: well, it's good, but the problem would be that it's at 197 characters – while that is under the 200-character limit, part of my job as prepper is to ask which details need to be in the hook, which add good colour, and which can be trimmed out. It seems to me that the New York Yankees should go in, as they're a world-renowned and very recognizable baseball team; the quote adds good colour, so I like it; but linking to the draft doesn't seem necessary to me, nor does mentioning the team he remained with. They do add good context, but I'm not sure how they'd make the reader more likely to click. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 21:24, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- @Theleekycauldron: How about this hook based on ALT0b?
- ALT0d: ... that Dominic Keegan refused a position on the New York Yankees to "go back and win another championship" for his college baseball team?
- I changed “turned down” to the more direct and shorter “refused”. I hope this is succinct for DYK, and fits your suggestions. Thanks again, NotReallySoroka (talk) 21:38, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- @NotReallySoroka: excellent, thanks! (by the way, you might wanna switch to straight quotes per MOS:CURLY) theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 21:49, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- I changed “turned down” to the more direct and shorter “refused”. I hope this is succinct for DYK, and fits your suggestions. Thanks again, NotReallySoroka (talk) 21:38, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- ALT0d: ... that Dominic Keegan refused a position on the New York Yankees to "go back and win another championship" for his college baseball team?
- @Theleekycauldron: How about this hook based on ALT0b?
- @NotReallySoroka: well, it's good, but the problem would be that it's at 197 characters – while that is under the 200-character limit, part of my job as prepper is to ask which details need to be in the hook, which add good colour, and which can be trimmed out. It seems to me that the New York Yankees should go in, as they're a world-renowned and very recognizable baseball team; the quote adds good colour, so I like it; but linking to the draft doesn't seem necessary to me, nor does mentioning the team he remained with. They do add good context, but I'm not sure how they'd make the reader more likely to click. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 21:24, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
- @Theleekycauldron: May I suggest this?
