Template:Did you know nominations/Dwarfs and pygmies in Ancient Egypt

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:42, 6 September 2014 (UTC)

Dwarfs and pygmies in Ancient Egypt

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... that in Ancient Egypt Dwarfs were assisted by guenons and worked as royal zookeepers and jewellers?

Created by Nephiliskos (talk). Self nominated at 07:09, 4 September 2014 (UTC).

Hook needs tweaking. While article is new enough and long enough and hook long enough and all within policy, article text does not indicate that guenons were actually trained as jewelers, only that bas reliefs were suggestive that they could be trained. Clear up the hook and it should be good to go. Schmidt, ^{Michael Q.} 12:05, 4 September 2014 (UTC)

Dear MichaelQSchmidt, the hook might be misleading phrased, my apology! I have re-written the sentence and hope it is more clear now. Regards;--Nephiliskos (talk) 15:34, 4 September 2014 (UTC)

Nephiliskos, how do you feel about

ALT2... that in Ancient Egypt dwarfs worked as royal zookeepers and jewellers and bas reliefs have shown them being assisted by guenons? Schmidt, ^{Michael Q.} 05:27, 5 September 2014 (UTC)

MichaelQSchmidt Umm, no. Sorry, but my teaser was thought to kick and catch readers. But if we put to much expert words into it, it would rather keep peoples at bay. And the most extraordinary fact around dwarfs and pygmies in Ancient Egypt was their ability to tame and train guenons and the fact that they were treated with greatest respect. Regards;--Nephiliskos (talk) 07:44, 5 September 2014 (UTC)

Good to go with first hook. Schmidt, ^{Michael Q.} 13:54, 5 September 2014 (UTC)