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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 17:26, 24 October 2016 (UTC)

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Ex Unitate Vires

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  • ... that King George VI, upon seeing segregation in South Africa and the national motto Ex Unitate Vires on his tablecloth, stated: "not much bloody Unitate about this place"?

Created by The C of E (talk). Self-nominated at 08:59, 14 September 2016 (UTC).

  • The article is new enough, long enough, within scope and well-referenced. While technically the hook is below the 200 character mark, I would consider shortening it. How about "...why did King George VI state "not much bloody Unitate about this place" upon seeing the "Ex Unitate Vires" motto? -- or something similar? Down from 185 to 127 characters. @The C of E: //Halibutt 09:32, 14 September 2016 (UTC)
  • ALT1 ... that George VI, asked to shake hands only with whites while visiting South Africa, noticed the motto Ex Unitate Vires on a tablecloth and said, "Not much bloody Unitate (unity) about this place!"? EEng 02:36, 19 September 2016 (UTC)
No, I don't think so. If you leave out the translation, it makes it hookier. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 07:53, 19 September 2016 (UTC)
  • Well, why not just edit it out? But here, I'll do it for you:
ALT2 ... that George VI, asked to shake hands only with whites while visiting South Africa, noticed the motto Ex Unitate Vires on a tablecloth and said, "Not much bloody Unitate about this place!"?
EEng 07:58, 19 September 2016 (UTC)
Though looking at ALT2 again I'm a little worried some might misread it as saying "George VI asked to shake hands only with whites while visiting South Africa". -- ??? EEng 20:04, 20 September 2016 (UTC)
How about
  • ALT3 ... that while visiting segregated South Africa, George VI noticed the motto Ex Unitate Vires on a tablecloth and said, "Not much bloody Unitate about this place!"? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:29, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
That's way better than my ALT2, which I'm therefore striking. EEng 05:47, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
May I point out that this has been approved since 14 September. The rest of this is surplusage. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 07:19, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
Indeed. I was considering promoting it to prep but knew I would be criticised if I substantially changed the hook on promotion, so I suggested the change here first. Cwmhiraeth (talk)
ALT3 is much better than ALT0. EEng 08:25, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
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