- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:36, 11 July 2019 (UTC)
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Gregory Gray
edit... that Gregory Gray went from being a member of a 1970s boy band to an influential cult post-punk indie musician, who worked under the pseudonym Mary Cigarettes?Source: "Bannister, Matthew (host); Robinson, Tom; McLaughlin, Noel (31 May 2019) Gregory Gray: The Irish singer who went from boy band to cult musician on BBC Radio 4. Last Word. Radio broadcast available on BBC Sounds (7 min)". + "Gregory Gray, 1959-2019: Influential Irish Post-punk Pioneer & Gay Icon Passes Away in Front View Magazine, 4 May 2019."- ALT1:
... that the Irish singer-songwriter Gregory Gray became a cult post-punk musician known as Mary Cigarettes, who published his work for free on YouTube and SoundCloud?Source: same as above - ALT2:
... that Gregory Gray, who was in a 1970s boy band, became a cult post-punk musician known as Mary Cigarettes and published his work on YouTube and SoundCloud?Source: same as above - ALT3:
... that the Irish musician Gregory Gray, who started his career in a boy band, became the post-punker Mary Cigarettes? - ALT4:
... that Gregory Gray was Mary Cigarettes?
- ALT1:
- Reviewed: Kine Beate Bjørnås
- Comment: I expanded the article from 1085 to 6445 prose characters (excluding headings, infobox, discography,etc). As it is about a gay person can it please go up in June, Gay History Month, or preferably on 28 June, the 50th anniversary of the Stonewall riots. Note that any hook should contain both names - Gregory Gray and Mary Cigarettes, as many people would know of him only under one of these names.
5x expanded by Felixkrater (talk). Self-nominated at 10:20, 9 June 2019 (UTC).
@Felixkrater: The article looks good: the expansion is long enough, it's long enough overall, and it's within policy. QPQ is also complete. I like the gist of the hook idea, but I think it could be worded in a snappier way; I've pitched an ALT3 above, similar to most of the others but a little more concise, and an ALT4, which is a radically shorter version but one that I think could generate curiosity and inspire some clicks. Let me know what you think, and feel free to pitch more variations if you'd like. I'll try to help get the hook ready ASAP so that, hopefully, it can be scheduled to appear on the main page before the end of Pride Month. —BLZ · talk 20:11, 21 June 2019 (UTC)
- @Brandt Luke Zorn: Thanks very much for the review, BLZ. I suggest a slight variation on ALT3:
- ALT5:
... that the Irish musician Gregory Gray, who started his career in a boy band, became the cult post-punker Mary Cigarettes?
- ALT5:
- @Brandt Luke Zorn: Thanks very much for the review, BLZ. I suggest a slight variation on ALT3:
The words 'Irish musician', 'boy-band', 'cult' and 'post-punker' should all draw a variety of readers. I think ALT4 is too simple as it has no context and nothing to entice.Felixkrater (talk) 21:11, 21 June 2019 (UTC)
- More than fair; I pitched ALT4 not so much as a genuine proposal in its own right, but more of an extreme minimalist version to stir brainstorming and use as a foundation to build back up from.
ALT5 is great. It reads smoothly and makes a judicious selection of intriguing words. It's ready to go! —BLZ · talk 21:20, 21 June 2019 (UTC)
- ALT6:... that the Irish musician Gregory Gray, who started his career in a boy band, became the cult indie musician Mary Cigarettes?
As it says in the article, he worked in a broad range of styles, but "indie" generally covers alternative, independent music. I'm on holiday and I won't be able to reply to any further comments until next week.Felixkrater (talk) 06:15, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
- @Yoninah: If you are happy with ALT6, please could you replace the tick. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:57, 9 July 2019 (UTC)