Template:Did you know nominations/Jack Brooksbank

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The result was: promoted by Mifter (talk) 22:36, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

Jack Brooksbank

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Converted from a redirect by Richiepip (talk), Martinevans123 (talk), and The C of E (talk). Nominated by The C of E (talk) at 09:58, 18 October 2018 (UTC).

  • Reviewing. First impressions favorable but "precident" in the hook does not appear correct. "Title" could be wikilinked, hopefully to a specific article, as could peerage. Copyedit the hook please. — Frayæ (Talk/Spjall) 16:27, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
  • Thanks, prec I dent notwithstanding this is good, the article has no problems and is ready for DYK. Frayæ (Talk/Spjall) 17:00, 29 October 2018 (UTC)


General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.

Overall: 2024 characters, copyvio free. Newly written from a redirect. No problems. — Frayæ (Talk/Spjall) 17:00, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

  • Review was done by a sock, so a second review is needed. Yoninah (talk) 00:07, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

 Doing... starting a second review in lieu of the previous by a sockpuppet. Flibirigit (talk) 01:28, 4 December 2018 (UTC)


General: Article is new enough and long enough

Policy compliance:

Hook eligibility:

  • Cited: No - ?
  • Interesting: Yes
QPQ: Done.

Overall: First paragraph in the "Early life and family" needs a citation. Ancestry section also needs a citation or a note. Some close paraphrasing issues noted below. The hook is cited and interesting, but is too dissimilar in wording to the article. Overall a decent article, and will be approved easily with a couple quick changes. Flibirigit (talk) 01:50, 4 December 2018 (UTC)

Paraphrasing
  1. the phrase "who split their time between London and France's Bordeaux wine region." is too close to the original, here
  2. the phrase "Brooksbank was general manager of Mahiki, the Mayfair nightclub" is too close to the original, here
@Flibirigit: I have made the changes and amended the hook slightly. I have removed ancestry because I cannot find something that reliably reports it. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 07:53, 4 December 2018 (UTC)
All questions have been answered. Hopefully a source for ancestry can be found later on, and the section restored. Thanks. Flibirigit (talk) 14:52, 4 December 2018 (UTC)