- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:42, 19 October 2018 (UTC)
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Jean Yancey
edit... that as a teenager, Jean Yancey and her friend mounted the first-ever high school fashion show in the US, attracting more than 5,000 teens and their mothers?Source: "In 1928, she was the brains behind the nation's first high-school fashion show, a three-day event attended by more than 5,000 teenagers and their mothers." (ColoradoBiz)- ALT1:
... that Jean Yancey, who helped more than 1,000 women launch their own startups, received the 1982 National Advocate for Women in Small Businesses award from President Ronald Reagan?Source: "In 1982 she received the National Advocate for Women in Small Business Award from President Ronald Reagan." (Colorado Women's Hall of Fame)
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Created by Yoninah (talk). Self-nominated at 21:34, 12 September 2018 (UTC).
- Reviewing, 36% earwig copyvio, new enough, interesting. Will complete soon.Whispyhistory (talk)
. The copyvio is almost all names which can't be changed, so ok. Hooks are in article with inline citations. Some sources require subscription. Well referenced. Hook character counts <200. Both hooks ok. Reads well. Thank you. Whispyhistory (talk) 06:40, 14 September 2018 (UTC)
Pulling, with due apologies. The hook says she and her friend "mounted" (an odd word, but anyway) this fashion show: the article says she persuaded some wealthy guy to host it. I do not think the two statements are equivalent, and just adding that detail makes for an excessively detailed and wordy hook. @Yoninah, Whispyhistory, and Cwmhiraeth:. Vanamonde (talk) 22:31, 15 October 2018 (UTC)
- I hear you, Vanamonde93. Perhaps we should go with a revised version of ALT1:
- ALT1a: ... that Jean Yancey was known in Denver as "the mother of all businesswomen", having helped more than 1,000 women launch their own startups?
- Pinging @Whispyhistory:. Yoninah (talk) 22:52, 15 October 2018 (UTC)
- ALTa is in article with following inline citations. Whispyhistory (talk) 04:44, 16 October 2018 (UTC)
