Template:Did you know nominations/Joo Koon rail accident

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:07, 17 December 2017 (UTC)

Joo Koon rail accident

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• ... that the unintentional removal of a software patch by a faulty signalling circuit led to one subway train colliding with another at Joo Koon station?
  • ALT1:... that a train collision occurred at Joo Koon station because the front train was wrongly designated by its signalling system to be half its actual length?

• ALT2:... that a train collision occurred at Singapore's Joo Koon station because the front train was wrongly designated by its signalling system to be half its actual length?
• Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Joseph Anokye

Created by Mailer diablo (talk). Self-nominated at 11:41, 21 November 2017 (UTC).

• @Mailer diablo: I will review this nomination. epicgenius (talk) 14:50, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: None required.

Overall: epicgenius (talk) 14:50, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• As this is your fifth nomination, no QPQ is required. However, you will need a QPQ for any new nominations.
  Of the two hooks, I'd approve ALT1 because it has less jargon. However, both hooks are a little unclear. The subway station is in Singapore, but the vast majority of casual readers wouldn't know that. How about this: [ALT2 moved above] epicgenius (talk) 14:50, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• I'm happy with ALT2 too. Give me a while to work through the other issues. - Mailer Diablo 18:00, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• OK, just tell me when you're done with fixing them. epicgenius (talk) 19:27, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• Okay, I've cited the hospital line and removed the other one. That should solve the issue. Thank you for reviewing! - Mailer Diablo 20:59, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• You're welcome. This nomination is good to go now. epicgenius (talk) 21:13, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

• The hook should be worded actively, not passively, so readers can understand what's going on. How about:
• ALT3: ... that one train rear-ended another at Singapore's Joo Koon station last month because its new signalling system determined the first train to be half its actual length? Yoninah (talk) 23:32, 10 December 2017 (UTC)

• Yep. I'm happy with that. - Mailer Diablo 03:23, 12 December 2017 (UTC)

• Thanks. Restoring tick for ALT3 per epicgenius' review. Yoninah (talk) 14:21, 12 December 2017 (UTC)