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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 19:37, 7 July 2020 (UTC)
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Junauda Petrus
- ... that author Junauda Petrus, whose debut novel received a Coretta Scott King Honor Award, is also a performance artist?
- ALT1:... that author and performance artist Junauda Petrus originally wanted to be an astronaut, but is now a "pleasure activist"? cited in article; "pleasure activist" mentioned at [1]
- Reviewed: National Paddy Day
Created by Paul2520 (talk). Self-nominated at 01:46, 30 June 2020 (UTC).
The article is new and long enough, no plagiarism as I can tell. I find the hook interesting and is supported by citations in the article. My critique would be the main prose under the heading "work" which could be cleaned up a bit or split into sections so it is easiest to tell "performance art" from "writing" etc. Terasaface (talk) 02:16, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review, Terasaface. That's great feedback. I took a look just now, and think this is a better strategy for when her actual performance is mentioned... right now, all the work is essentially her writing, from plays to poems to her novel. = paul2520 (talk) 14:39, 2 July 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote ALT1. I moved the cites for the birthdate out of the lead and, frankly, all the other cites verifying noncontroversial material should come out too. I tagged her birthplace—where is it? In general, the primary refs of Penguin Random House and The Playwright's Center are being overused. It's also not clear what a "pleasure activist" is. If it can't be linked, it should probably be put in quotes. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 18:56, 7 July 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback, Yoninah! I addressed the comments: (1) moved citations out of lead, (2) added a source with Minneapolis as birth place, (3) reduced number of times the identified references were cited (while keeping the content referenced).
- Re: "pleasure activist", I quoted it in the article; I also hadn't heard the phrase; the best is in the new interview source I added.
- Let me know if you have further comments! = paul2520 (talk) 19:16, 7 July 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review, Terasaface. That's great feedback. I took a look just now, and think this is a better strategy for when her actual performance is mentioned... right now, all the work is essentially her writing, from plays to poems to her novel. = paul2520 (talk) 14:39, 2 July 2020 (UTC)