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The result was: promoted by The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 20:56, 31 August 2020 (UTC)
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Kanon Shizaki
... that Japanese voice actress Kanon Shizaki played in a band while she was studying at Syracuse University as an exchange student?Source: Agency profile
Created by ZappaOMatic (talk). Nominated by Narutolovehinata5 (talk) at 12:11, 17 August 2020 (UTC).
New enough, long enough, neutrally written, well referenced. As most refs are foreign-language or offline, unable to check for close paraphrasing. QPQ done.- The hook is pretty weak. It's too bad you don't have more information to work with in the article. Perhaps something about her acceptance as Rinko because she's shy too? Or if you prefer to stick with her musicianship on both sides of the Pacific, perhaps just work on sharpening the hook wording. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 00:43, 27 August 2020 (UTC)
- To be honest I'm not too familiar with the subject and I'm not sure how to reword the original hook in such a way that it would be "sharpened". Perhaps ZappaOMatic can help with additional hooks or adding additional material? They're more familiar with the subject and perhaps could say something about the shyness angle. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:55, 27 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Yoninah and Narutolovehinata5: Hmmm, I'm also unsure on how to sharpen the original hook outside of specifying Syracuse is an American school. I can try to add some more material should I run across any to see if they generate any hook ideas; the BanG Dream! 8th Live this past weekend turned up some content that I added earlier, but I'll be on the lookout if anything else comes to interest.
- In the meantime, I'll throw some alt hooks out there from what is currently available: ALT0 goes down the personality route as discussed; ALT1 is probably more interesting, but it's dependent on two sources so I'm not entirely sure if it will fly. Both hooks could probably use some refining, but it's a start. Zappa⚡Matic 07:21, 27 August 2020 (UTC)
- ALT1: ... that Kanon Shizaki, the second voice actress for BanG Dream!'s Rinko Shirokane, was quickly embraced by fans and her Roselia bandmates, as her shyness mirrors her character's personality? Source: Geki Rock interview
- ALT2:
... that in August 2020, Kanon Shizaki was part of both the headliner and the opening act at a live concert?Famitsu, press release
- Thank you, ZappaOMatic, both alts look good. I was just asking for more color/description in the hook. What's wrong with using two refs for ALT2? As long as they're both inline cited, this looks fine. Yoninah (talk) 11:25, 27 August 2020 (UTC)
- Of the two new hooks I think the first one is better, the second sounds somewhat vaguer and doesn't mention her career as a voice actress or anime musician. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 13:59, 27 August 2020 (UTC)
