Template:Did you know nominations/LAbyrinth (2017 film)

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 15 March 2017 (UTC)

LAbyrinth (2017 film)

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Johnny Depp

• ... that in the upcoming film LAbyrinth, Johnny Depp (pictured) will be investigating the murders of Tupac Shakur and The Notorious B.I.G.? Source: Variety

• Reviewed: What U Workin' With? Soon. Mount Davis (Oakland)

Moved to mainspace by Captain Assassin! (talk). Self-nominated at 12:57, 4 February 2017 (UTC).

• @Captain Assassin!: Nominated two days after being moved to main namespace, and is about 2300 bytes, satisfying length and date criteria. The plot section is remarkably similar to a paragraph in this ref and needs to be changed, as it's essentially a copyright violation right now. The fragment "...to the Randall Sullivan's..." is odd; perhaps delete "the". Moreover, it also uses text similar to the source, as "bought the film rights to the Randall Sullivan's Los Angeles police corruption book LAbyrinth" in the article is quite similar to "bought the rights to Randall Sullivan’s L.A. cop corruption book LAbyrinth" in the source. The date "September 7, 2016" is the date it was reported in the media, not necessarily the date he signed a contract. (There are a number of these.) The fragment "who investigated the murders of rappers" makes it appear he only investigated such murders; perhaps insert "the" before "rappers". The "a" in "...Anderson playing a corrupt LAPD officer..." is superfluous, since we know he is playing the specific officer named. The fragment "joined the film" is overly colloquial; please change it. The second paragraph in "Production" is a bit droning and seems like filler, though I'm not sure how this can be changed given the nature of the data it presents. The article would benefit from a one or two paragraph "Background" section explaining the murders and ensuing investigation. The hook needs modification, as it is not Depp who will perform the investigation, but the character he portrays. Mindmatrix 19:16, 4 February 2017 (UTC)
• I forgot to mention: QPQ completed, and image is freely licenced with an associated OTRS ticket. The image is suitable at the size needed for DYK. Mindmatrix 19:18, 4 February 2017 (UTC)

• @Mindmatrix: Done some copy-editing on the article. No need to rewrite the hook, actually it's interesting way to attract more readers to the article. QPQ will be here soon. --Captain Assassin! ^{«T ♦ C ♦ G»} 12:01, 13 February 2017 (UTC)

  @Captain Assassin!: QPQ still required, as previous QPQ was applied to another DYK nomination. Changes appear to be OK, and I've made a phrasing tweak to the article. I'd still strongly suggest a background section briefly discussing the history of the murders, but it's not necessary for DYK. Mindmatrix 17:52, 17 February 2017 (UTC)

• QPQ's done now. --Captain Assassin! ^{«T ♦ C ♦ G»} 11:29, 11 March 2017 (UTC)

• QPQ completed. I had solicited more input regarding the hook (see this archived discussion), and the only reply agreed with my assessment. I've added ALT1, which is a minor tweak of the original hook - do you find this acceptable? Mindmatrix 15:08, 12 March 2017 (UTC)
• ALT1: ... that in the upcoming film LAbyrinth, Johnny Depp (pictured) portrays a detective investigating the murders of Tupac Shakur and The Notorious B.I.G.?

- Length, Date, Cite, QPQ, and Earwigs check. The image is freely licensed per OTRS. As this has sat for a few days I'm approving ALT1 to keep everything moving. Mifter (talk) 02:47, 15 March 2017 (UTC)