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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:22, 25 February 2017 (UTC)

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Maria Eugenia Bozzoli

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Created by Rosiestep (talk), Dr. Blofeld (talk), and Ipigott (talk). Nominated by Rosiestep (talk) at 02:03, 5 February 2017 (UTC).

Thank you, team, for meeting an interesting woman, on good sources, Spanish source accepted AGF, no copyio obvious. I prefer the original hook, - don't like "first" in hooks ;) - Before approving I have a few wishes for the article:
  • The lead could be more of a summary instead of repeating when she started working and the length of some term, for example.
  • "... work has been into ..." is not a phrase I know, - should I learn it?
  • "She has worked with government institutes on numerous occasions" - I don't think that needs to be said at all, certainly not in a summary.
  • Even the prizes might be summarized, instead of all these colourful names.
  • To have a 1975 date under "education" looks funny.
  • The quote in the Career section needs a ref right behind it.
  • "mainly been concentrated" - the article is long enough, we don't need redundancy ;)
  • In the second para there, we have "Bozzoli" three sentences in a row.
  • Acclaim - don't think that's a frequent header, but may be wrong.
  • "as well as daughter, Leticia," looks strange.
Good reading! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:29, 10 February 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for the review, Gerda Arendt. I believe I've addressed the comments mentioned. --Rosiestep (talk) 23:48, 23 February 2017 (UTC)
thank you! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:18, 24 February 2017 (UTC)
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