Template:Did you know nominations/Maria Pinto (fashion designer)

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The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 03:39, 8 March 2012 (UTC)

Maria Pinto (fashion designer)

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Created/expanded by HueSatLum (talk). Self nom at 18:10, 4 March 2012 (UTC)

  • I updated the citation with the one that mentioned the dress. I cited that article already but forgot to add it to that particular statement.—HueSatLum 22:22, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
  • Addresses my initial concerns. Unfortunately, I'm now on vacation, so won't be able to finish review from here. I still needed to finsh reading the article, though I didnt forsee any other issues. Good luck.—Bagumba (talk) 06:37, 6 March 2012 (UTC)
  • I'd think so, yes. As far as I can see, the article's good to go, but I haven't formally reviewed it. -- Zanimum (talk) 13:38, 7 March 2012 (UTC)
  • Long enough, new enough, clearly and neutrally written, well referenced, and I found no overly close paraphrasing. I would have said more about the kinds of clothes she designs and her stylistic approaches, and I don't see the need for the refs in the lead para, but no harm. However, the second reference from Forbes does not make clear that it requires clicking on the slideshow arrow to see the support for the points it references. Is there another URL that could be used there? Also the second reference about the Joffrey Ballet, #11, goes to the same place as the first, #3. Fix those and I think it will be good to go and will move it into the holding area for International Women's Day. Yngvadottir (talk) 19:30, 7 March 2012 (UTC)
Oops, I saw something else. The hook claims she designed her prom dress; the article only says she made it, and the source clearly says it was a Halston design: "I made my own prom dress from a Halston pattern." So proposing:
ALT1 ... that fashion designer Maria Pinto made her own prom dress in high school?
and, which I think I prefer:
ALT2 ... that Maria Pinto designed the purple sheath dress Michelle Obama wore to give her husband "the fist bump heard 'round the world"? Yngvadottir (talk) 19:39, 7 March 2012 (UTC)
  • ALT2 is good to go. I've struck out the other hooks for clarity (didn't check them, but ALT2 is Yngvadottir's preference and I agree that it's an interesting one). Schwede66 20:13, 7 March 2012 (UTC)