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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 10:49, 25 December 2015 (UTC)
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Mozu kofungun
edit... that Mozu kofungun (pictured) is a group of forty-seven kofun burial mounds in Japan of which twenty-one are key-hole shaped, twenty round, five rectangular, and one is of indeterminate shape?
5x expanded by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 08:01, 27 November 2015 (UTC).
Jan 3 368 char, Nov. 27 3459 char/368x5=1840 > 5x expansion/long enough. Expansion completed Nov. 27/nom same day/new enough. Neutral. Cited. No apparent close paraphrasing. Per commons, photo is free use with attribution. QPQ is complete. Hook is 196 char/under 200 maximum. The hook is interesting, but I am confused by the sourcing. The English translation says there are 48 tombs, 20 keyhole, 21 round and 5 square (math doesn't work 20+21+5=46). The Japanese language page says there are 44 tombs 22 keyhole, 16 round, 5 square, 1 unknown shape (math works). Neither however are 47 as stated in the hook and I cannot tell from the sources how many are each shape because they clearly conflict. Maybe it would make more sense to be less specific. The article and the hook need to be changed, but you could stay with the sources if you said there were originally over 100 and less than half remain of varying shapes including ... or something along those lines. I'd also like the article to state somewhere that the status is still pending with UNESCO, so that it is evident it hasn't yet been approved. This article makes it clear it is still undecided (but it says there are 90 tombs). Uffff! Please ping me when you have addressed the issues. Thanks for an interesting article! SusunW (talk) 04:55, 14 December 2015 (UTC)
- SusunW Thanks for the review. I agree there is a confusion of numbers. I have changed the lead text as suggested. I now propose the revised
- ALT1 hook ... that Mozu kofungun (pictured) was originally a group of more than 100 Japanese kofun burial mounds of which now less than 50% remain of the key-hole, rectangular, round and unknown shapes? Nvvchar. 10:38, 16 December 2015 (UTC)