Template:Did you know nominations/Myanmar National Symphony Orchestra

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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 20:56, 26 December 2013 (UTC)

Myanmar National Symphony Orchestra

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... that the Yangon-based Myanmar National Symphony Orchestra, founded in 2001, was permitted to perform just three public concerts in its first dozen years of existence?

Reviewed: National Forensic DNA Database of South Africa

Created by Hybernator (talk). Self nominated at 00:56, 15 December 2013 (UTC).

I'm reviewing this now. Hassocks5489 (Floreat Hova!) 21:39, 21 December 2013 (UTC)

Created on 15th Dec, and long enough. References are appropriate and sufficient. I have linked the article to a few others. The hook fact is booked up by the sources, particularly [2], and other facts in the article are correct and suitably referenced. However, there are some sections of wording which are rather too close to their sources. This is a specific problem with certain passages rather than a constant problem throughout. Examples of close paraphrasing include the following:

It was not until 2004 that the orchestra held its first concert at MRTV's Studio A for invited guests.
Things changed for the better in January 2012 when Khin Nyunt was freed from house arrest.
Because it lacked skilled musicians to play such key instruments as violins and oboes, the orchestra enlisted musicians from Vietnam...

Please could these be reworded accordingly. All other aspects of the article and hook are fine for DYK. Hassocks5489 (Floreat Hova!) 21:54, 21 December 2013 (UTC)

Thanks. I've reworded those three lines. Please check again. Hybernator (talk) 16:10, 22 December 2013 (UTC)

Good stuff; now fully verified and ready to go. Hassocks5489 (Floreat Hova!) 16:59, 22 December 2013 (UTC)