Template:Did you know nominations/Nancy B. Jackson

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 08:40, 12 October 2015 (UTC)

Nancy B. Jackson

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Nancy Jackson, 2011
Nancy Jackson, 2011

Created by Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk). Self-nominated at 14:00, 22 September 2015 (UTC).

  • The article is new enough, long enough, well referenced, and nominated timely. No copyvios were found. QPQ was done. The photo appears to be OK. My question is about the hook. I frankly don't find the two proposed hooks very interesting, although they are sourced. I would have liked to use the "first implementer" claim in the article, but I could not find support for that claim in the cited sources. So I would suggest rewording the article to say "helped to develop" or something similar. And I would suggest a hook something like this:
  • ALT2 .... that chemist and science diplomat Nancy B. Jackson helped to develop the U.S. State Department's Chemical Security Engagement Program? MelanieN (talk) 23:37, 30 September 2015 (UTC)
  • I added a couple of citations that support the "first implementer" phrasing, see revised hook below. Thanks! Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk) 13:21, 1 October 2015 (UTC)
  • ALT3 .... that chemist and science diplomat Nancy B. Jackson was first implementer of the U.S. State Department's Chemical Security Engagement Program?
  • Good work! ALT3 looks fine and the DYK is good to go. MelanieN (talk) 14:02, 1 October 2015 (UTC)