Template:Did you know nominations/Operation Crimson

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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 21:30, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Operation Crimson

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HMS Victorious

  • Comment: Not a self nomination

Created by WPGA2345 (talk). Nominated by Matty.007 (talk) at 18:46, 16 October 2013 (UTC).

New enough
Length just OK - 1600 characters excluding block quote/refs/captions/links
AGF with offline references from a range of reputable books
QPQ not required as nominator has made only a minor edit to the article
Image fine and public domain licence checks out with original source (Robert L Lawson collects photos from the period and this one is clearly taken from a US aircraft accompanying a mission)
Hook length, format and interest all fine BUT the hook states five battleships where the article lists four. Which is correct? Also the "ten destroyers" appears in the article but is not directly cited there.
Two small concerns before approval - the fourth reference should use more fields of the cite web template, at the very least the access date and the name of the individual or organisation publishing it (may need to search other pages of the site to find this), so that its level of reliability can be established by readers - and there should be a separate lead section per WP:MOS, suggest inserting a section header such as "The operation" or "Operational detail" between 1944 and Unlike. Baldy Bill (sharpen the razor|see my reflection) 13:27, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
The article lists five battleships, ten destroyers sourced, fourth reference expanded, separated where advised. Good to go now? Thanks, Matty.007 14:04, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
Apologies if I'm not understanding correctly, but I can only see four battleships: "HMS Queen Elizabeth, HMS Valiant, HMS Renown, and the French battleship Richelieu". All other concerns addressed very promptly, thanks. If you want to propose an alt-1 hook with four battleships, or clarify the 5th one, then I believe we're good to go. Baldy Bill (sharpen the razor|see my reflection) 14:41, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
Really sorry, my maths seems to have gone somewhere. I may have been counting 'Queen Elizabeth' as two separate ships... Wording adjusted in hook. Is this OK? Thanks, Matty.007 14:53, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
All concerns addressed. Good to go! Baldy Bill (sharpen the razor|see my reflection) 15:16, 19 October 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. Matty.007 15:17, 19 October 2013 (UTC)