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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:49, 23 July 2017 (UTC)

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Owusu Afriyie Akoto

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Created/expanded by Crosstemplejay (talk). Self-nominated at 16:24, 5 July 2017 (UTC).

  • New page, created wholly by Crosstemplejay on July 3–5, and, at 3,100 characters of prose double the required length. The article is mostly well-written and gives key facts. Here are few ideas for improvement before it's ready to go.
    • Did Afriyie Akoto work as consultant to the United Nations and to the World Bank? Or did he consult for the World Bank, which is a specialized agency of the United Nations? The difference has implications for this hook as well as for the article. The main source on this issue is the Ghana government biography which says "He also worked as a consultant to the World Bank, United Nations on Soft Commodities (Cocoa, Coffee, and Sugar)." I'm inclined to the second interpretation, but perhaps finding another source will clarify the issue.
    • The formatting for the footnotes strikes me as a little odd. It seems to me that organization names such as Ghana Decides are being shoehorned into the (firstname, lastname) format for authors, resulting in constructions such as "decides, ghana". In my opinion it would be better to give such names in their original order and capitalized (i.e., as "Ghana Decides".
    • Is Odekro.org a good source? It doesn't seem too scrupulous and it gives his profession as "Medical Doctors/Health Workers". It's not essential to the article and you might consider dropping it, especially if you can find another source for his birthday.
    • Where possible, give the original date of news articles, instead of or in addition to date accessed. For example [1] has a clear date of Sunday, 25 July 2004.
    • Could you please add some explanation to the description of the 2004 election? The current text "only 10 of the total votes cast" makes it sound like he lost in a landslide, but the winner only got 26 votes. I presume this is some kind of party voting system with delegates; it would be good if you could clarify that context.
    • "Whiles at Parliament, her was the Deputy Ranking Member" — who?
    • Is there anything more to be said the "vetting" process? (What is the role of Eagle Eye Security, mentioned in the source?)
    • Probably readers will have a great interest in Afriyie Akoto's plans and actions thus far as Minister of Agriculture; along these lines maybe bring in some sources on his statements such as [2], [3], [4], [5]; and see also Ghana Star tagged articles).
  • Thank you for this contribution and I hope this list of suggestions is not too demanding. groupuscule (talk) 06:26, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Hello groupuscule, thanks for the most thorough dyk review I have seen. Great views expressed above. I have taken them all on board and made the necessary edits. Please review it again and offer your verdict. Thanks and God bless.CrossTemple Jay 15:28, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Hello C.t.jay, I'm glad you could do something with these comments. (My premise in being picky with the review is that not only should Wikipedia have high standards for its front page, but also that peer editing is helpful in writing, and I appreciate when others do it for me.) Your expansion looks good. Good catch with 10 votes -> 20 votes. I think some further tweaking would improve the appearance of the footnotes, but with your permission I will edit the page myself to do this, and you can see what you think. There is a major point remaining, however, and this is the first point in the list above, regarding consultation for the World Bank and UN vs World Bank (which is part of UN). I say major mostly because it affects the hook and so it should be scrutinized extra carefully. Do you think you can find another source to clarify the matter? Cheers, groupuscule (talk) 23:42, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Hello Groupuscule, thanks once more. Please feel free to do the edit. I am struggling to find another reference hence my rewording of the initial hook to do away with any ambiguity. If you find another ref you can add it but else I hope the new hook will do. Thanks once again. CrossTemple Jay 08:23, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
  • OK I went through and fixed up the references. I think result looks OK. Personally I don't bother with the citation templates; I just type in the relevant information. But whether or not you use the templates you should try to be scrupulous about finding the author's first and last name (rather than use the newspaper name) and including the original date of publication.
Also based on looking at the article from CitiFM I think it's definite that he consulted for the World Bank, but not (to our knowledge) for the UN in any other capacity. So I put that back in the hook and added that citation to his biography. Are these changes OK with you? If yes, I am ready to put the green check mark, but I want to make sure we are in agreement. groupuscule (talk) 15:11, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Without doubt, one of the most interesting discussions I have had on Wikipedia. Thanks for all the effort. I am OK with all you have done. You can give the green light if you please. Thanks once again. God bless.CrossTemple Jay 21:11, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
  • Good to go; nice work. See you around, groupuscule (talk) 22:15, 7 July 2017 (UTC)
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