- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 22:53, 4 November 2018 (UTC)
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Puisand Lai
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Puisand Lai
- ... that Canadian national wheelchair basketball player Puisand Lai (pictured) was rated number seven in the world in girls' wheelchair tennis in 2017? Source: [1]
Created by Hawkeye7 (talk). Self-nominated at 10:12, 4 September 2018 (UTC).
Article is new, long enough, and within policy... hook size is fine, but its content should be more interesting... QPQ done and image is licensed correctly. Runningibis (talk) 22:26, 6 September 2018 (UTC)
@Hawkeye7: I have struck the hook as I don't see how being ranked #7 in the world is interesting to a broad audience. Perhaps something else more interesting abpout her life can be said? I see she's also participated in other sports: perhaps a hook about that could work instead? Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 01:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
- I thought it was unusual because she's primarily a basketball player. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:57, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
- I have unstruck the hook (diff), because I think it's adequately appealing to a broad enough audience. North America1000 13:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
- I agree with North America, the hook is interesting, but I will propose the following: Flibirigit (talk) 22:59, 15 October 2018 (UTC)
- ALT1:... that Puisand Lai (pictured) represented the Canada women's national wheelchair basketball team in 2018, and was also rated the world's seventh overall in girls' wheelchair tennis in 2017?
- I like ALT1. I usually remove "also" when copyediting but here, with a single sentence, the "also" gives a clear signal that it's talking about something new, that basketball and tennis are dissimilar sports. It looks to be just under 200 characters. @Runningibis: can you review ALT1? – Reidgreg (talk) 18:37, 19 October 2018 (UTC)
- ALT1:... that Puisand Lai (pictured) represented the Canada women's national wheelchair basketball team in 2018, and was also rated the world's seventh overall in girls' wheelchair tennis in 2017?
