- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:46, 25 May 2018 (UTC)
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Rashid Vally
edit... that the record shop owned by music producer Rashid Vally was among the few places people of different racial backgrounds could socialize in apartheid South Africa?- ALT1:
... that under the apartheid government in South Africa, people of different racial backgrounds socialized in the record shop owned by music producer Rashid Vally?
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- Reviewed: Edge of the Knife
- Comment: I would appreciate further wording suggestions for the hook; I believe the fact is fascinating, but I'm trying to find a concise way to say it.
Moved to mainspace by Vanamonde93 (talk). Self-nominated at 12:05, 13 May 2018 (UTC).
Interesting life, on basically one source, fine with me, no copyvio obvious. The hook fact is interesting, better said - I think - in the original.- Suggest ALT2: ... that music producer Rashid Vally owned a record shop in apartheid South Africa that was among few places where people of different racial backgrounds could socialize?
- Suggestions for the article:
- Infobox
- explain or link langarm
- (for my taste) avoid square brackets in quotes, - some quotes could simply be rephrased
- I find "Personal life and record shop" funny - as if the shop sells personal life ;)
- give Mannenberg a release year
- avoid easter egg black South African music, best by linking Black South Africans openly in the lead - --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:46, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I agree that ALT2 is phrased better, and I've struck my original; I don't think a new reviewer is needed, as you're just rephrasing. I've found a link for langarm, though it isn't the best article. There's three sources, all used heavily...where are you getting "basically one source?" I've tweaked the section title and the quotes: I think we can be forgiven for using "given" outside quotes when Ansell says "give". Release year also done. I'm not a fan of infoboxes when information is minimal, sorry...I'm also trying to think of a better way to link "black South African Music" but the Music in South Africa article is very bad, and I can't think of anything else. Vanamonde (talk) 11:17, 16 May 2018 (UTC)
with thanks. Please do something about black South African music, which is both an Easter egg, and a redirect. How is black South African music? Or no link, if nothing good is available? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 07:42, 22 May 2018 (UTC)
