Template:Did you know nominations/Sadjarwo Djarwonagoro
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The result was: withdrawn by nominator, closed by Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 02:33, 29 June 2020 (UTC)
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Sadjarwo Djarwonagoro
- ... that a former leftist minister became the member of parliament in an anti-communist state?
Created/expanded by Jeromi Mikhael (talk). Self-nominated at 14:04, 27 May 2020 (UTC).
- New enough and long enough. No QPQ necessary (zero credits). I can't check the foreign-language sources, so I'm going to have to assume good faith. One thing I notice is the article needs copy editing for English. Have you considered taking this to WP:GOCE, Jeromi Mikhael? The issues I found are enough to probably merit a copy edit before approval. Raymie (t • c) 23:17, 30 May 2020 (UTC)
- @Raymie: Please type down parts with bad English grammar, so I can fix it.--Jeromi Mikhael (talk) 01:24, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
I've gone ahead and done it for you. There are several extraneous uses of "the", incorrect tenses, etc. Check this diff to see what I changed; hopefully that aids your writing of additional articles. Raymie (t • c) 01:46, 31 May 2020 (UTC)
Hi, I came by to promote this, and first edited the article for English grammar. I added "clarification needed" tags in a few places where words or unfamiliar acronyms were inserted. I find the hook confusing. You take great pains to explain he was not a leftist, so why are you calling him a leftist in the hook? I would prefer to see a normal hook with his name in bold and some interesting fact about him as a hook angle. Yoninah (talk) 22:20, 16 June 2020 (UTC)