- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:48, 8 June 2019 (UTC)
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Sangita Magar
edit... that Sangita Magar took her SLC exams whilst going through acid attack treatment?Source: [1] [2]
** ALT1:
... that Sangita Magar was attacked by an acid because she jilted the attacker? Source: [3]
Created/expanded by CAPTAIN MEDUSA (talk). Self-nominated at 17:41, 29 April 2019 (UTC).
- I'm looking into this--but it needs serious copyedits. Drmies (talk) 02:27, 2 May 2019 (UTC)
- I scrapped ALT1. CAPTAIN MEDUSA, please read the source more carefully. She said explicitly that she never had anything to do with the dude, and that she criticized the media for having turned it into some fake love story--which is exactly what you were doing with that hook. Drmies (talk) 02:43, 2 May 2019 (UTC)
- Sorry about that I was meant to write that the attacker claimed. ___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 17:52, 2 May 2019 (UTC)
By now I have done so much work on this article that I shouldn't be reviewing it anymore. The usual things are fine--it's long enough, new enough, etc. But the hook isn't particularly impressive or elegant, and I am also wondering if the article shouldn't be retitled to include both names, so also that of Sisma Basnet. So, there are a few things to rethink here. Drmies (talk) 01:17, 3 May 2019 (UTC)
- I agree that a better hook could be proposed here: I don't think many people outside of Nepal know what an SLC is, thus limiting the appeal of ALT0. I think a better idea would be to simply write a hook that focuses on the fact that she became an activist after an acid attack. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 12:34, 4 May 2019 (UTC)
- ALT2:
... that Sangita Magar turned into an activist after becoming an victim of acid attack? - ALT3:
... that Sangita Magar, an victim of acid attack became a human rights activist after hearing other victims stories?Source: [4]
- I am willing to review, and thank you Drmies for what you put in it, and reviewed already. Can we mention Nepal in the hook? I prefer ALT2, the hearing of other similar cases is not prominent in the article. Can we say "after she became ..." because the name is not necessarily a girl's? Mention age, perhaps? - Funny, just today, I also stepped from reviewer to coauthor, for Ernst Christoph Dressler. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:57, 4 June 2019 (UTC)
- ALT2a:
... that Nepalese student Sangita Magar turned into a human rights activist after she became an victim of acid attack aged 16?
- @Gerda Arendt: How is this hook?___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 17:02, 6 June 2019 (UTC)
that's fine, a added "human rights" from ALT3. Please find a link for her to avoid the orphan tag. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:48, 6 June 2019 (UTC)
Is there a QPQ for this nomination? Please also take care of the orphan tag before this can be promoted.- The ALT2a hook is not grammatical. Here is an alt:
- ALT2b: ... that Nepalese student Sangita Magar became a human rights activist after surviving an acid attack at the age of 16? Yoninah (talk) 22:30, 6 June 2019 (UTC)
- thank you for the better wording. I saw only one DYK credit in the nominators archives, is that wrong? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:47, 7 June 2019 (UTC)
