Template:Did you know nominations/Seven Deadly Arts with Akshay Kumar
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:44, 13 November 2014 (UTC)
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Seven Deadly Arts with Akshay Kumar
edit... that Akshay Kumar presented the martial arts television series Seven Deadly Arts with Akshay Kumar for free?... that Bollywood actor Akshay Kumar made his television debut with Seven Deadly Arts?
- Reviewed: Jean Abraham Grill
Moved to mainspace by Skr15081997 (talk). Self nominated at 07:35, 21 October 2014 (UTC).
Article is new enough. QPQ is done. Although size crosses 1500 character limit, article looks incomplete. Several lines appear irrelevant in the article and if removed, number of characters will fall below 1500. I will suggest you to add information about number of episodes, reception/review of the series. Vigyanitalkਯੋਗਦਾਨ 08:52, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- I have removed excessive detail from the article. I could not find any reviews for the series in a reliable source. More info has been added.--Skr15081997 (talk) 12:31, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- There is no citation for the fact that no sequel was produced. :) --Vigyanitalkਯੋਗਦਾਨ 12:26, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
- This fact has been removed.--Skr15081997 (talk) 16:05, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
All facts are sourced, no close paragraphing found. Both hooks are properly formatted. Original hook is better as compared to ALT1. Original good to go.
The hook is misleading – it sounds like some kind of pay-per-view show that Kumar is presenting for free. The source says that he donated his time and talents for free; I changed this in the article. I would like to suggest a different hook:
- ALT2:
... that in his television debut, Indian film actor Akshay Kumar played both master and student of seven types of martial arts?Yoninah (talk) 00:37, 12 November 2014 (UTC) - I have no issues with ALT2.--Skr15081997 (talk) 15:11, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
- ALT2 can also be misleading as he was not both master and student for any of the marital art. --Vigyanitalkਯੋਗਦਾਨ 15:33, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
- ??? The English source says he played the master of 3 of them and the student of 4 of them. Yoninah (talk) 19:59, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
- Yes. So master of some and student of rest. Not both master and student of seven. --Vigyanitalkਯੋਗਦਾਨ 23:57, 12 November 2014 (UTC)
- Trying again:
- ALT3:
... that in a seven-part television mini-series, Indian actor Akshay Kumar demonstrated seven types of martial arts and talked about the benefits he derived from them? - ALT4: ... that Indian actor Akshay Kumar, who began learning martial arts at age 9, hosted a 2004 television mini-series demonstrating seven martial arts styles? Yoninah (talk) 00:38, 13 November 2014 (UTC)
I saw that you have done some re-arrangment in the article. Present version also is okay, length wise and other policy issues. Among above two hooks, ALT4 is more interesting. It is properly formatted and facts are supported with inline citations. Good to go. --Vigyanitalkਯੋਗਦਾਨ 02:33, 13 November 2014 (UTC)