Template:Did you know nominations/Statue of Queen Elizabeth II, Lagos
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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 23:08, 22 September 2021 (UTC)
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Statue of Queen Elizabeth II, Lagos
- ... that Queen Elizabeth II sat for Ben Enwonwu on twelve occasions as he created his sculpture of her? Source: "He produced a sculpture of Queen Elizabeth II for which the queen sat a dozen times, including at Buckingham Palace; the sculpture was completed in 1957" (Rediscovering the Art of Ben Enwonwu, Farah Nayeri, 24 September 2019, New York Times)
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Created by No Swan So Fine (talk). Self-nominated at 22:01, 13 September 2021 (UTC).
Hi No Swan So Fine, review follows: article created 7 September and exceeds minimum length; sources look to be reliable, I can't access the ones used for the hook but happy to AGF; I found no issues with overly close paraphrasing from the sources cited; awaiting a QPQ, I've also picked out a few sentences that I think would benefit from attention:
- "It was intended that the completed statue would sit in the Nigerian House of Representatives prior to the establishment of the Federation of Nigeria and the end of British colonial rule in 1960" - would perhaps be better not mentioning the Federation of Nigeria as that had already been established as a British protectorate in 1954.
- "Upon its exhibition at the exhibited by him at the Royal Society of British Artists exhibition in 1957 The Times commented that the statue..." - Exhibition, exhibited, exhibition...
- "Enwonwu also created a bust of Elizabeth to use as a scale model to help depict her subsequent pose and depiction of her regalia." - Doesn't read well for me "to help depict her ... depiction of her regalia"?
- "The Queen subsequently commissioned to create a bust of her eldest son, Prince Charles" - missing "Enwonwu" after commissioned?
- All the best - Dumelow (talk) 11:40, 16 September 2021 (UTC)
- Many thanks @Dumelow:, my prose looks much improved with your suggestions! No Swan So Fine (talk) 08:44, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
Hi No Swan So Fine, looking good and QPQ now completed - Dumelow (talk) 08:57, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
- Many thanks @Dumelow:, my prose looks much improved with your suggestions! No Swan So Fine (talk) 08:44, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
