Template:Did you know nominations/Swadeshi Steam Navigation Company

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 22:49, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Swadeshi Steam Navigation Company

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~~... that V. O. Chidambaram Pillai formed a Swadeshi company to compete against the monopoly of a British India company?~~ Source: Maritime Heritage of India

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Thomas Wilkinson King
Comment: ~~Article nominated at WP:GOCE for copy editing~~

5x expanded by Gfosankar (talk). Self-nominated at 14:22, 25 March 2019 (UTC).

The article expansion is new enough and long enough, and QPQ is present. However, I do have concerns that relate to the copyediting. I'm not sure if this is just my unfamiliarity with Indian English, but to me it seems like the GOCE nomination is definitely merited and would improve this article quite a bit. Sentences like "The objective of the company not only to run the ship between Tuticorin and Colombo but to train the navigational and ship building techniques to the Asians." look incomplete or just read a little unusually. An editor with more India knowledge may be able to help. Raymie (t • c) 06:20, 31 March 2019 (UTC)

@Raymie: Copyediting completed. Thanks. Gfosankar (talk) 02:59, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

@Gfosankar: It looks a lot better now. I've also improved some areas where sentences read rather choppy and the phrase "the company" was excessively repeated. We are good to go. Raymie (t • c) 04:57, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I came by to promote this, but I wonder: are you being deliberately vague about what kind of companies these are? I think you could do a lot better with the hook. Even that part about why he founded the company, "as an act of political and financial opposition to the British", is more interesting. Yoninah (talk) 23:23, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

ALT1:... that the collapse of Swadeshi Steam Navigation Company led to the murder of a district collector of the British Raj? Gfosankar (talk) 05:01, 19 April 2019 (UTC)

Thank you. @Raymie: could you review ALT1? Yoninah (talk) 21:53, 20 April 2019 (UTC)

Certainly. I've added one definite article (a "the") to the hook. ALT1 is included and cited (source 11). It is good to go! Raymie (t • c) 22:34, 20 April 2019 (UTC)