- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk) 09:59, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
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Tala Bashmi
... that Bahraini chef Tala Bashmi played on the women's national football team for seven years before starting her culinary career?Source: "After a seven-year stint as a footballer for the Bahrain National Team and subsequently pursuing fine arts and illustration at university, Tala made a career shift and finally entered the world of food through setting up her home business ‘Baked by T’ – which became an instant hit in Bahrain." -- Harper's Bazaar Arabia
Created by Bridget (talk). Self-nominated at 00:14, 7 September 2022 (UTC).
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Hook eligibility:
- Cited:
- Interesting:
- Other problems: - needs a citation directly after the sentence
QPQ: - pending
Overall: Apart from a QPQ, this only needs the citation for her football carreer directly after the sentence (just duplicate the appropriate one). Interesting carreer! But if you want to make it more explicit, you could swap "started her culinary carreer" in the hook for "becoming chef patron in a restaurant in a five-star hotel" or something like that. At present, "culinary carreer" does not really bring across just how successful she has been with that, imo. (But I would accept ALT0, it's okay.) –LordPickleII (talk) 14:22, 8 September 2022 (UTC)
- LordPeterII, thank you for your comments. That's a great point about the hook - what about these alternatives?
- ALT1: ... that Tala Bashmi played on the Bahrain women's national football team for seven years before opening a restaurant in a five-star hotel? Sources: "After a seven-year stint as a footballer for the Bahrain National Team and subsequently pursuing fine arts and illustration at university, Tala made a career shift and finally entered the world of food through setting up her home business ‘Baked by T’ – which became an instant hit in Bahrain ... Eventually, she moved back to the Middle East to open her inaugural restaurant, Fusions by Tala." -- Harper's Bazaar Arabia (ref #3);
More on restaurant and hotel: "While she's only in her early thirties, Bashmi is already the head chef of a fine-dining spot in her home country. Fusions, which is at five-star property the Gulf Hotel Bahrain Convention & Spa, has been freshly renovated and was reopened to the public as Fusions by Tala on Thursday, February 13." -- The National (ref #5) - ALT2: ... that Tala Bashmi played on the Bahrain women's national football team for seven years before becoming chef patron of a restaurant in a five-star hotel? Sources: same as ALT1 above
- ALT1: ... that Tala Bashmi played on the Bahrain women's national football team for seven years before opening a restaurant in a five-star hotel? Sources: "After a seven-year stint as a footballer for the Bahrain National Team and subsequently pursuing fine arts and illustration at university, Tala made a career shift and finally entered the world of food through setting up her home business ‘Baked by T’ – which became an instant hit in Bahrain ... Eventually, she moved back to the Middle East to open her inaugural restaurant, Fusions by Tala." -- Harper's Bazaar Arabia (ref #3);
- Bridget (talk) 15:07, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- QPQ provided; and yeah I like the ALTs more, so I've struck the original one. Citation also in place, so ready to go. –LordPeterII (talk) 16:10, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
@Bridget and LordPeterII: Hi! quick question – are we sure we're comfortable calling the Gulf a "five-star hotel" in wikivoice based off the word of a single paper? That seems like a bit of a stretch to me, but it should be easy to fix... theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/her) 23:24, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- @Theleekycauldron: I've just removed it from the article as to avoid delving into hotel ratings. I think the fact that she opened a hotel restaurant in the capitol stills read like a commendable achievement.
- ALT1b: ... that Tala Bashmi played on the Bahrain women's national football team for seven years before opening a restaurant in a Manama hotel? Sources: same as ALT1
- ALT2b: ... that Tala Bashmi played on the Bahrain women's national football team for seven years before becoming chef patron of a restaurant in a Manama hotel? Sources: same as ALT1
- Best, Bridget (talk) 23:56, 11 September 2022 (UTC)