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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:19, 8 November 2019 (UTC)

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The Elephant Queen

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  • ... that the filmmaking duos Victoria Stone and Mark Deeble spent 18 months to find an elephant for 2019 documentary film The Elephant Queen? Source: [1]
    • ALT1:... that the 2019 documentary film The Elephant Queen directors Victoria Stone and Mark Deeble spent four years to watch elephant herd for their film? Source: [2]

Created by CAPTAIN MEDUSA (talk). Self-nominated at 19:56, 17 October 2019 (UTC).

Interesting film and story, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. Article first: I did quite some copy-editing, please check and revert what you don't like. Urgent: do something about "will open ... on 18 October" (today is 20 October) and mention some year in the introduction, which could summarize a bit more anyway. The hooks have good ideas. I'll reword them both for you, - say if acceptable ("filmmaking duos" is a strange phrase, and should be duo if used at all - get bolded link to the front):
ALT0a: ... that for their 2019 documentary film The Elephant Queen, the two directors spent 18 months to find an elephant for the main character? Source: [3]
  • ALT1a:... that for their 2019 documentary film The Elephant Queen, the two directors followed elephant herds for four years? Source: [4]
Both don't mention the relocation which would make it more dramatic, while the unlinked names of the directors probably don't add much to garner interest. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:11, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
I found out that they followed the elephant in Tsavo East National Park. Both directors don't have a wiki page. Thank you Gerda Arendt for copyediting the article and rewording the hook.___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk (We are the champions, my friends) 11:49, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
Please change the tense for 18 October. How about mentioning the peace prize nom in the lead. I know that the directors have no page, - create them or perhaps don't mention them in a hook, as I did in ALT1a. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:00, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
Gerda Arendt How about this hook?___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk (We are the champions, my friends) 12:12, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
Good idea but too much before we get to the title, please reword, - and I meant to the lead and prose of the article, not the hook ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:56, 20 October 2019 (UTC)
Gerda Arendt, oh, it now appears in the article lead. ___CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk (We are the champions, my friends) 11:52, 21 October 2019 (UTC)
I mean the hook wording, say the title first, and then some of the many many words that come before, - too complex a structure, - if I have to read it twice before I can grasp it others may have the same problem. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:56, 21 October 2019 (UTC)
... that the 2019 family documentary The Elephant Queen was inspired from 2009 drought in Amboseli National Park?
... that the directors of 2019 family documentary The Elephant Queen spent 18 months to find elephant for the lead role?
... that for their 2019 family documentary The Elephant Queen the directors followed elephant herd for over four years in Tsavo East National Park, Kenya?
Thank you for more offers, but I don't want to torture you ;) - Btw, don't link to current countries, such as Kenya. - I believe that documentary has a broader appeal than family documentary. So, approving ALT0a and ALT1A. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:30, 21 October 2019 (UTC)
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