I am a student at Everett Community College. I am currently working towards completing my Associate's Degree in Computer Science, and transferring to the University of Washington, or Washington State University. I enjoy traveling and going to new places and experiencing new things. I have a fond appreciation for nature and like to go on hikes. I always take a lot of pictures when I go hiking or traveling. I used to play guitar, and recently considered buying one and getting back into it. I don't like eating out at restaurants, so I cook at home quite a bit.
I was born and raised in Thailand, and am interested in working on some of the Wikipedia articles about Thailand and Thai food. I lived in Thailand for the first 23 years of my life, and I know both the country and the food very well. Based on my experience, I think I could make some good contributions to those articles.
Article Evaluation
editI visited the Jasmine page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects of it worth commenting on: two references are dead links, the section labeled “Jasmine tea” doesn’t have any citations, and Jasmine flowers are claimed to be used as a symbol of motherhood in Thailand, but there is no citation for it.
Dead links
editThe fourth reference in the article is a dead link. It was retrieved on November 22, 2011, nearly 7.5 years ago, so it makes sense for the link to be dead. The ninth reference is a link to books.google.com which is also dead. This reference should be changed to keep the book info it already contains (the book name, author and page number), and the link should be removed.
Informal tone
editThe section labeled “Jasmine tea” under “Cultivation and uses” doesn’t have any citations. The writing comes off a bit informal to me as if written from a personal experience, based on the tone of the writing.
Citations
editTowards the end of the article, there is a section called “National Flower”. Under Thailand, it says “Jasmine flowers are used as a symbol of motherhood.” I am from Thailand and can confirm this is true, but it still needs a reference. Only someone from Thailand or someone who travels there a lot would know this.
Summary
editI think the Jasmine page on Wikipedia is decent, but could use some polish. The sections in the beginning of the article on the biology of the plant are detailed and well-sourced. The article could use some small improvements in the “Cultivations and uses” section, as well as the “National Flower” section towards the end.
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