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Hello!
I think that you picked a really interesting article to fix-up! It also has plenty of room for improvement, which is great for the purposes of this class!
Some things that I think you could work on to improve this article:
-Adding more image, specifically of the different types of mummy techniques, so the readers can have a visual of the differences between the techniques -Adjusting the lead so that the information in it matches the rest of the information provided in the article
*I feel like the sentence about the diet does not really relate to the article
*Mention that there are different types of mummification techniques that the Chinchorro used
-Adding references to the "Preparation of Mummies" section, because there are currently no references in this section -Add an image for the tattooing section, because that would be interesting for the reader to have visuals
I wish you the best of luck with your future work editing this article!!
Virali