Critique an Article (2/20/17)
editChoose an article: Pop Rocks
Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? No, many of the facts given do not have citations so it is impossible to see where the author got these ideas from. For example in the sentence "Eventually Zeta Especial S.A. became the brand's owner and sole manufacturer..." there is no citation so we do not know where this information is coming from.
Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? I'm not crazy about the urban legend section. It has some interesting points to it, but it's simply too long and dragged out. If I was coming to this page to learn more about pop rocks I would not care about all of the details and examples of having an exploded stomach due to eating pop rocks and drinking soda.
Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? I think this article is neutral. The authors do not make any claims that are biased it seems like.
Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? The information comes from various sources such as an ABC news video piece, books, and articles. These sources are neutral as they have no stake in pop rocks. All of the sources are separate entities and not related to the brand of pop rocks.
Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No, the authors do a very good job of stating facts without interjecting their opinions into the pieces.
Check a few citations. Do the links work? Is there any close paraphrasing or plagiarism in the article? The link for the video celebrating the 50th anniversary of pop rocks goes to the homepage of ABC news, rather than the video. Maybe the video was deleted? But this is very bad for anyone looking for the original source. I'm not really sure why the author keeps on citing the TV show Heston's Feast and How to Cook Like Heston. I don't see how these shows have to do with pop rocks.
Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? I think information about the sales of pop rocks could be something that would be interesting to say in this article. Maybe a section about the popularity of pop rocks over time?
Possible Articles (2/24/17)
editSocial class differences in food consumption
Finalized Topic (2/27/17)
editI've decided to work on the article about British restaurants for my editing project. I'm planning on adding a section on the history leading to the development of British restaurants. On its Wikipedia page, the history of World War II is glazed over, but I think it is important to mention since the concept of British restaurants would not have developed without the events that happened in World War II. Here are some sources I'm planning on using...
http://www.history.ac.uk/ihr/Focus/War/londonRation.html
http://www.1900s.org.uk/1940s-british-restaurants.htm
'Article Draft (3/20/17)
editAdd a new section titled Food of British Restaurants
The ministry of dieticians prepared food based upon regional preferences and health. For example, the food served in Scotland as opposed to London was very different due to the preferences of taste by the inhabitants. Health was also a concern for BRs, as they were supposed to provide diners with "one third of the days energy needs" [1]. The ministry of dieticians was especially concerned with Vitamin C intake. Due to the war efforts and rationing, fruit intake was extremely limited. Vegetables such as cabbage, which has a high percentage of Vitamin C, were implemented as a staple vegetable in BRs, in order to provide diners with beneficial nutrients. There was concern that with mass catering, vitamins such as Vitamin C would be destroyed in the food sources [2].
The food of British restaurants was said to be filling and of good quality. For 9d customers could get a three course meal. Traditionally, customers wanted a meal of meat and two vegetables. Most BRs served choices of five meat dishes, five vegetables, and five desserts. BRs in more populated areas had even more options. Popular dishes included roasts and potatoes, which acted as a substitute for bread. The foods served in British Restaurants could be prepared in large quantities, which made them good options for feeding an abundance of people. [3]. The preparation of food in BRs was industrialized, which also helped with inexpensive, commercial food preparation. For example, volunteers sliced potatoes with a machine, rather than by hand [4].
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- ^ Atkins. Communal Feeding in War-Time: British Restaurants, 1940-1947. pp. 125–139.
- ^ Atkins. Communal Feeding in War-Time: British Restaurants, 1940-1947. pp. 125–139.
- ^ Atkins. Communal Feeding in War-Time: British Restaurants, 1940-1947. pp. 125–139.
- ^ HuntleyFilmArchives (2014-01-24), World War Two British Restaurant. Film 91022, retrieved 2017-04-16