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Bio

About me

Hello, my name is Jenny Gill. I am a running start student at EVCC this spring quarter. I'm taking three classes, English Composition, Interpersonal Communications, and Political Science. I enjoy many outdoor activities such as fishing, hiking, swimming, and hunting. I have wanted to be a hunters education instructor with my dad since I was nine years old. In Washington state, you have to be 18 to become an instructor. I am apart of a blended family, I have one older sister and two younger sisters. I have two dogs, Coco and Grizzly. I also have four chickens, Brian the Rooster, Daisy, Goldie, and Shadow. My favorite store to shop at is Bath and Body Works. Fun fact, I will always have a candle in my room. I am a caregiver, I work at The Cottages at Marysville Senior Living, it is a memory care center. My career goal is to become a Traveling Licensed Practical/Vocational Nurse.

My Wikipedia interests

My Wikipedia interests probably will pertain to my favorite singers such as, Justin Bieber, Harry Styles, Shawn Mendes, and Thomas Rhett. Since I will be going into the medical field, I will probably be interested in some medical articles. I am also very interested in watching documentaries, especially murder documentaries. As a volunteer in my free time, I might watch a specific documentary and look it up on Wikipedia, possibly make a few edits. Overall, I am on Wikipedia for projects assigned by Mr. Arntson, although I will probably make time to do work on Wikipedia on my own time.

Article Evaluation

This month I bought a female Syrian hamster named Winnie from the pet store. I have done a lot of research about owning a hamster before I decided to purchase her. Since I have gotten her, I've loved researching information about hamsters on Wikipedia. In my research, I have come across this article about Syrian hamster’s behaviors. As a new pet owner to a female Syrian, I was interested about what I could learn. I would like to be a part of the many volunteers that help better wikipedia articles. When I visited the Syrian hamster behavior  article on Wikipedia, I found three aspects of it worth commenting on: subheadings, citations, and relating to the audience of the article.

Subheadings

The paragraphs developed in this article are well written and have good information. However, there is a lack of subheaders that pertain to Syrian hamster behaviors. In addition to sleeping habits, reproduction, interaction with others, feeding behavior, and laboratory behaviors. Adding more subheaders such as, body language, illness behaviors, normal, and abnormal behaviors can further improve the article.

Citations

In this type of informational article, there should be many citations. Most of this information is factual, when there is a fact stated there should be a citation. That being said, there are only a few facts that aren’t backed up by citations throughout the article. For example, “The female Syrian hamster has anatomic features that are unique from other animals” should have a citation.

Relating to the audience

Another area the article could do better is appealing to a wider audience with further information. Most people who look up such articles are generally people who have hamsters as pets. The article needs to contain things like more in depth information about a hamster's everyday behaviors, description of the behavior looks like, or how to connect with or further improve a human's interactions with Syrian hamsters. With this information included, it would broaden the audience it pertains to.

Conclusion

In conclusion, the article has some well developed and supported information about Syrian hamster behaviors. Although, it could improve in subheaders, citations, and broadening the audience. I think by taking my advice it would help expand this article for the better.